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Divination of an African Sunrise

Dancing Trails
rise up
with sweet smelling perfumes,
shaping and recanting
in all different guises.
Beautiful plumes
dart through the air
spiraling to
the bigger picture.
Divining in light.
Divining in dream.
You came to me
in sweet smelling perfumes
unfurling mist,
dancing in trails,
                    racing into ash.

— Conect11, Jun 10, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

19 years ago

Real poetry

to me is evocative, compresses meaning and uses language beautifully. This qualifies on all points, dig it. One small point, "sweet smelling perfumes" jarrs a bit, I imagine something more musky, primal, cheers Weirdelf

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