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The Bus Ride

I was riding the bus

it seemed like for hours,

when I noticed an older man

and he was holding some flowers.

I kept admiring them

now and again,

when he suddenly came over

and said, "Excuse me, friend…

I noticed you looking

at the flowers, and me,

and I think that my wife

would like you to have them, you see.

I’ll simply explain

that I gave them away,

to a nice stranger I met

on my bus ride, today."

Well, I thanked him, and watched him

exit the bus all alone,

and walk into a small cemetery

and kneel at a lone headstone.

 

— docmaverick, Aug 02, 2007

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

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Prototype

18 years 10 months ago

Well, well

Well i liked to read it. It make your head thing, and that's good. I only think that the title could me more ... hmm... diferent!
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poet_inside

18 years 10 months ago

Poetic indeed, this was a

Poetic indeed, this was a very good read, it was sweet and sad at the same time. Thanks for the read!!!! Brittany Rae
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A. M. Painter

18 years 10 months ago

Hm

after i read this that was litterly my reaction, i liked this peice. a. m. painter
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

very affective story,

i personally think you lose a bit of direct emotional connection by stretching for rhyme. cheers, Jess

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