Chewed Roses

Chewed roses
on the
blood splattered floor

I feel this
god forsaken place
inside
the temple of my heart

and I am telling you
each brick was cemented
in cold faced hate

I am powerless
I am victim
I am scarred without
I am scarred within
my temple made from
Innocence

I seek Adam
who seeks Eve
I am the Genesis
of my as yet unwritten
Book of Revelation

damnation strangles
my necklace
of unborn consciousness
I am forced by
my very own
Lucifer to parade my nakedness
with a smile that has died
in each of my incarnations

the Law of Karma
shines upon me

I was foolish
to try and add
some extra episodes
into my
Book of Life

— Lenny of Cohen, Aug 08, 2007

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Wow!

These lines are excellent and resonate! I am forced by my very own Lucifer to parade my nakedness with a smile that has died in each of my incarnations I like the dark imagery, the karmic references you have made here and the way it flows - its an excellent piece and i enjoyed reading this very much - my kinda poem! thanks for sharing it! Kaz x

Lenny of Cohen

18 years 10 months ago

Thanks !

When I wrote "Chewed Roses" my soon wife to be was giving a tarot reading to one of her friends, I may have tuned into the psychic ether for my inspiration ! I am a gnostic, and have believed in reincarnation for 32 yrs and am always happy when a piece works out like this. So Kaz, thanks for your comments, much appreciated. Lenny

Scout

18 years 10 months ago

Gritty

and powerful, your message comes across with a strong voice, good write.

Lenny of Cohen

18 years 10 months ago

Thanks again

Glad you enjoyed the poem ! Lenny

A. M. Painter

18 years 10 months ago

i like this

i like this a.m. painter

Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

for once

I don't think the word "gritty" could do justice to this scratchy, bloody, and lovingly unnerving poem.I wish I could see you read this under a red strobe effect. Brilliant! Mark

Lenny of Cohen

18 years 10 months ago

Red Strobe Light......

Mark, Hi and thanks for the comments, appreciated as always. Maybe I can read it live under a red strobe light and post it on you tube or whatever it is called. Lenny

barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Nice to See

It's so nice to see a work by one so informed---intellectually and intuitively. You grace these pages. Thanx, Chuck PS: Again, though---and I say this with no intent to besmirch---a bit of spelling/punct improvements would further purify it. For one example, godforsaken (at least according to American dictionaries) is one word, not two. You are, I daresay, one hell of a writer.

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