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Frost Smith
Frost Smith
Aug 21, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Letting Go

How do you let go

Your heart wrapped up like a bow

Memories trapped in my mind

Roads traveled together that wind

Crushing pain that won’t stop

Tears fill my eyes to the top

How do solve this riddle

I’m stuck in the middle

I know it’s for the best

Still I can’t rest

 

 

— Frost Smith, Aug 21, 2007

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anonymitylll

18 years 9 months ago

i like the idea behind it..

i like the idea behind it.. the only thing i dont like is the contant use of simple rhymes. great job though.. good good
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

Really relate to the concept

but, here's one for the Guinness book of records, I am normally very critical of rhyme where it detracts from the best choice of words or phrase. Here I humbly disagree with anonymityll, I think the simple rhyme adds an irony to the complexity and depth of the idea. I wonder if "How do solve this riddle" should be "How to solve this riddle"? The lack of punctuation marks re-enforces the rhetoric nature. cheers, Jess
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oklahoma_girl2009

18 years 9 months ago

This poem

I like this poem. It has a good rythym and ryhme scheme. Good job! Yours Truly, Oklahoma_Girl2009

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