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Unseen damage

 

Unseen damage 

 

A feeling created by one who seeks to destroy

one who obliterates all thoughts of peace and joy

once who was constantly there, smothering all freedom

one who thinks all success should remain a part of his so called kingdom

 

you should not have yielded so much power

yet with one spoken word, you did

the effects of your abusive utterances, far reaching

the damage cause thereby, permanent, not easily healed

 

for those you have hurt, the wounds run deep

for those you have damaged, they no longer sleep

the calm, healing sleep, that others seem to be entitled to

for those you have hurt, have had all their rights stripped away by you

 

you plead innocence, you claim no harm was meant

you shout out injustices that you seem to think others have shown to you

but what about all those you have hurt?

those lost, forgotten souls, you should now atone to?

 

they are left, faceless in their plight

hidden from the world and all plain sight

they are once again like a small child, constantly wanting, needing

it is your approval they are craving, wanting and seeking

 

upon these poor unfortunate soiled souls you have left your mark

a mark as clear and as brutally harsh as it is stark

will they ever be able to once again seize control of their destinies

or will they be forever left your victims, destroyed by your self centered convictions?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

— Feebie, Aug 24, 2007

About the Author

Region, Country: Gauteng, ZMB

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Robert Frost

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

Feebie, a few of your poems

I have felt unable to comment on, please don't feel ignored, it's just that some of them seem, like this one, to be written just for him, not other readers. cheers, Jess
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Jillian Botha

18 years 8 months ago

Hi Jess

This one was written during a very bad time, i was having alot of trouble with my ex at the time, and i think most of my stuff written round about this time will reflect that. Is there a way i should perhaps change them do you think? I think i wrote them in the hopes that i could one day put them all in book form and give them to my ex to read. not that it would make any difference, but these are things i do not have the strength to face him with right now so i put all those feeling and thoughts into poetry......Does any of this make sense? Kind regards Jill Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

it makes a lot of sense

all part of the process of letting go. Some things I needed to say to ex's but could not see them I wrote then burnt, like a sacrificial letting go. I AM NOT SUGGESTING YOU BURN THESE POEMS. Nor can I suggest a way to change them. Remember I am only offering my own personal opinion and it is very possible that these poems will truly help others going through similar difficult times. Your raw personal honesty has become kind of your trade-mark around here, you do it so well without becoming trite or cliched. Don't stop or change. Well, change when you need to, 8) cheers, Jess
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Jillian Botha

18 years 8 months ago

BLUSHING!!!!

Hi Jess thanks once again!!! I was not even aware that i had a trade-mark round here but now i am thank you *blushes most profusely* And not to worry i will not burn any of them!!! Kind regards Jill Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

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