Grateful the Journey

In my quest for the Highest Mountain

I’ve endured the Valley of Tears,

I’ve spent some time in the Meadow

but in that Valley, it seemed like years.

The Canyon of Pain was excrutiating

and the water was bitter to drink,

but the experience was quite invaluable

and more important than you’d think.

The Wind has been my companion

whenever warm or bitter cold,

the Fading Trails seemed all uphill

and the Grade’s made me feel old.

Yet I have perservered,

I’ve climbed to my Highest Tree,

I don’t begrudge the Journey

for the Journey has made me…..Me.

— docmaverick, Sep 04, 2007

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

to be frank, it's been said before, and better

still the message is clear, poignant and true as ever. Loved the lines "The Wind has been my companion whenever warm or bitter cold," the stretching for rhyme spoils this a bit for me. Probably works better in music where such contrivances are freely forgiven. You are a muso, is any of your music online that I could listen to? cheers, Jess

docmaverick

18 years 8 months ago

I believe you've been kind...

..whenever evaluating my work; (or should I say "play"?). I know that you make a point of trying to read a bit of everyone's poetry, so I must add that I'm very flattered that you've commented on so many of my pieces. I also understand that my "sing-songy" style and approach to poetry frazzles you a bit, and yet you still take the time to honestly critique my poems. I thank you for this...also for even comparing this piece to another work, which you obviously hold in higher regard. Alas, to answer your question...I have no examples of my music on the internet, so you'll just have to leave the comforts of Sydney, Australia and come hear the Maverick Bros. at Salton Sea, California-which is our next "gig". I DO have some lyrics I could post for your perusal, however. Read my song, "Rewind". Thanks again for the keen insight, Doc. P.S. Notice that I found the perfect picture? A "dock".

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