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The AntiChrist Mystery Acrostic

Killed a boy nearly

in his opulent palace

no mother would ever stand for it. A man of many lusts and

gold, a man of many wives.

son of David, why’ve you gone astray

over witchcraft and demons; wisdom is required

lest you fall prey to the enemy,

once you’ve become a victim, you become him.

my king! My lord! This requires a patient heart! Stand,

offer every single talent for is this held against you

now and in the coming age

?

— Conect11, Sep 13, 2007

Critiques

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Bosspoet

18 years 9 months ago

Antichrist

I was kinda lost not knowing the point you was trying to get across through the poem. I will have to read it again. But I like the choice to write a poem about this subject.Also you maybe want to work on the rhyming sequence of this poem. I have found that this sometimes helps you keep focus on the subject of the poem and also keeps the reader interested in the poem as they read it.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 9 months ago

To see this used,

as I have heard is a treat.Try GOD SPEED,OR HEAVEN HELP US .I will thanks for the insperation 11. Grand, Box
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

I am the antichrist!

well... sort of. No man is my master, nor king nor ever. Pretty cool poem but. cheers, Jess

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