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Nov 03, 2007
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Victim of Changes
blood painted walls
reserve the victims
slashing
for a while longer
the murder scene
the shocked police officers
build up the atmosphere
to a crescendo of sombre
a cold
shivering wind
disturbs the torn curtains
a dog howls
like a tormented wolf
a once
innocent life
lost forever
to a senseless act
of mindless brutality
Lenny Gazbowski
(C)2007
— Lenny of Cohen, Nov 03, 2007
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Critiques
IKnowNoBox
18 years 7 months ago
The opening stanza throws this off a bit
IKnowNoBox
18 years 7 months ago
Slashings may be a bit thrift or pulp
IKnowNoBox
18 years 7 months ago
Slashings may be a bit thrift or pulp
Lenny of Cohen
18 years 7 months ago
Your comments are
IKnowNoBox
18 years 7 months ago
Don't yank the engine out
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