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Victim of Changes

blood painted walls
reserve the victims
slashing
for a while longer

the murder scene
the shocked police officers
build up the atmosphere
to a crescendo of sombre

a cold
shivering wind
disturbs the torn curtains
a dog howls 
like a tormented wolf

a once
innocent life
lost forever
to a senseless act
of mindless brutality


Lenny Gazbowski
(C)2007

— Lenny of Cohen, Nov 03, 2007

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Lenny of Cohen

18 years 7 months ago

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appreciated guys! Personally though I love my first verse!!! But hey, thats because I'm the one who wrote it!!! The poem title is from a classic metal song, the band - my heroes JUDAS PRIEST. As for re-writing this, yes I will be, and you'll know! Regards, Lenny

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