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Time on your hands

Time is lying
still
on your palm
like an injured bird



In times like these
the world
seems to
hold its breath

But soon enough
the clock on the kitchen wall starts ticking audibly again
and while you listen, it seems to tick faster
and faster still

And all of a sudden time is running through your fingers like so many drops of water
and you move faster and faster still

But soon enough
you realize
you're still
too slow
to catch on

Only the early bird catches the worm

How early do you have to rise to catch time
who, after all, is no worm hiding away in the smooth warm earth
but a powerful bird whose speed outruns even space itself

— Ink Dragon, Nov 18, 2007

Critiques

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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

Good to hear from you ID

The early bird gats the worm...(so if I am a worm it is best to sleep in). I like the sweeping pace of this poem you really capture the phases of time concern. In ink, Dabbler
ID

Ink Dragon

18 years 6 months ago

Yeah, I´m still alive

thanks for your praise (again), I will hopefully get around to looking at your stuff soon, I´ve missed out on some things... Regards, ID
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 6 months ago

I've got used to times tricks

2 in particular it plays. When you a 2 1 is half your time, when you are 50 it is 1/50th. So it goes quicker. The other trick is sad/depressed times when time travels so slowly. I am a thousand years old, 50, 20, 15 and sometimes 3. It all works cheers, Jess
MK

Mason King

17 years 4 months ago

A well written piece Ink, I

A well written piece Ink, I enjoyed your metaphoric use of time being something we can't catch or control, that instead we are forced to go with the flow, Time like change are unabatable conditions of the physical realm. M
ID

Ink Dragon

17 years 4 months ago

Mason,

that was why your poem reminded me of this one. How the seconds can stretch into eternities sometimes, and how whole hours can fly by without us noticing... Thanks for reading, Ink
MK

Mason King

17 years 4 months ago

Such relativity could almost

Such relativity could almost suggest that time's a mechanism of the mind, in that case one would ask the question, isn't everything? ;) M

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