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Janice Pearce
Janice Pearce
Feb 01, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Nature's Shift

White mounds

Vagabond ways

Tiny Grains

Holding eachother

Drifting Patterns

Dry waves

A moving canvas

Lake Michigan's rippled gem

Sleeping Bear Dunes

 

 

— Janice Pearce, Feb 01, 2008

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cricket

18 years 4 months ago

wow

excellent lanuage use in this poem.. tiny grains holding each other, that line is great ... BrownEyesBlue
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 4 months ago

Nice language usage

Your word choice and structure here match the tone of the poem. Each line is a "shift." Very nicely put together, Janice. One minor thing to fix, "eachother" in line four. Really great poem. ~ Ronda
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 4 months ago

Nice choice of words

but sorry, doesn't engage me. A portrait without emotional content. A watercolour portrait that adds nothing to poetry. Sorry to be so harsh. If you worked at this you could engage your reader instead of putting the pretty picture in a drawer. cheers, Jess
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 4 months ago

Nature's Shift

Musical Prayers, Thank you for your kind words, I am glad you were able to use a small piece to make a changee in the world~Janice~

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