Winter's Logo

Veiling us

in pale silver layers

maturing in height,

winter's upheavel

engulfing all in sight.

bodies shiver

inching closer

to the fire.

trees barren of

of all their attire.

perennials buried deep

transfixed in a coma

anxious for spring's reach

under crusted loam.

— Janice Pearce, Feb 02, 2008

About the Author

Country/Region: USA

Critiques

Barbara Writes

18 years 4 months ago

GREAT

Like this, you caught a cold winter in well put together words

Janice Pearce

18 years 4 months ago

Winter's Logo

Thanks for reading Barb!Glad you enjoyed it~~Janice~~

weirdelf

18 years 4 months ago

Well its hot and humid here, sweating in rivulets

and still it made we shiver, reminisce of cold times and hot fires. It hasn't snowed in Sydney for over a 100 years but I have been skiing in the Snowy Mountains (did you know we get more acreage of snow than Europe?) But it's mostly wilderness. I only vote 3 because it is well described but seems to me to lack a human connection, hope this helps. There is a forum running at the moment about what the star system means and could mean, check it out. cheers, Jess

Janice Pearce

18 years 4 months ago

winter's Logo

Jess, Thank you for reading and your comments. some need human connection to relate, some don't, thanks for your honesty!

testjess

18 years 4 months ago

I don’t always need human

I don't always need human connection in a poem, but is it ever really absent? Perhaps I was feeling a bit diconnected when I wrote that comment, on re-reading I enjoyed it more, cheers Jess

poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago