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Judeth

Her time was marked,
by men who marched,
to where, we'll never know...

..time has moved on,
she still sings her song,
her beauty a haunting glow.

 

Not the master race,
but you'd know her face,
with features like no other...

..her face can blend,
resembling a friend,
a daughter, a mom, or grandmother.

 

The men she knew,
in brown, black and blue,
were men she'd really not seen...

..some worked so hard,
others shared the yard,
where the streets were oh, so mean.

 

Her nostrils scorched,
by bodies torched,
whose lives are now a blur...

..but, Judeth's eyes,
tear up from the cries,
of love towards one fuehrer.

 It's a new day,
that cannot wipe away,
those tears from Judeth's eyes...

..she literally gave her all,
bringing on the "fall",
so, let us never forget the "rise"!

 

— docmaverick, Feb 21, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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JB

Jillian Botha

18 years 3 months ago

WOW!!!

Hey Doc This one grabbed hold of me and still will not let go!! the power of imagery you have used in this piece took me on a journey through the Holocaust.... and the camps. This is a very very good write!!! As Janice has said "From beginning to end awesome write"!!! Kind regards Feebie Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 3 months ago

I can't be mentorish to you anymore

You are so much a poet in your own write. But don't relax, will still crit with spirit! But not this one, I think it needs to rest a while. If you feel like going back to it later, ok, maybe, but let it gestate a bit, it is powerful. cheers, Jess
docmaverick

docmaverick

18 years 3 months ago

elf...

....then, are you saying that the, "..son, is father to the man..."??? For, you should think not-that you are no longer a mentor. For is it not as important to accept the role of "muse"? Seriously, you've been doing this much longer than I, (plus, your education), and I am proof that, if one listens, learns, and applies...one can grow. Your comments have helped me grow. Let them not stop...now. ...doc. P.S. Besides, someone else may be listening. :>)

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