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That Me
Right before the lines went dead,
I heard my voice on the other end.
But it wasn't this me
it was another me
from 1977, summer
August to be specific
blazing hot day on the Jersey shore
even the ocean sizzled
roiling up onto the beach
crashing around my ankles
toes and heels buried as deep as I could get them into the sand
tiny pale pink bikini on my ten year old body
the strap at the back of my neck tied too tightly
but having too much fun to attempt a better fit
ten year old hands
brown over the long summer
splashing my brother
who chose to wail and threaten
instead of just admitting he was having fun too
(kids!)
my hair in a disarray that can only be achieved
by arid Atlantic breezes and too many days
spent in the city pool
a vast chlorine riviera
ten year old eyes squinting in the noon sun
those bright spears of reflected light
off the ocean's surface
an acceptable torture
just another part of summer in New Jersey
and hearing my name
I turned around
just in time to see my father
stretch out on his blanket
dark wavy hair glossy and thick
arms crossed behind his head
as peaceful as I would ever see him again
and in my ten year old mind
I thought,
"My dad is so cool".
That is the voice I heard before the lines went dead.
That me.
And it said
"This is the best day ever".
And it was too.
Critiques
RSScheerer
18 years 3 months ago
That Me
fthillsboomer
18 years 3 months ago
Read it twice
fthillsboomer
18 years 3 months ago
I am unhappy to report
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
:) thank you, Moonie~
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
thank you, RT~
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
ok. no judgement here, RT
RSScheerer
18 years 3 months ago
Consent?
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
yay!!!
eric ashford
18 years 3 months ago
I enjoyed this work. The
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
thank you, Eric.
Janice Pearce
18 years 3 months ago
That Me
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
:) Didn't you love them??
Rob Graber
18 years 3 months ago
I really enjoy this poem. I
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
:) hi Rob..
Candlewitch
18 years 3 months ago
Hey Lisa
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
:) thank you, Cat!
orgami
18 years 3 months ago
summer sum
orgami
18 years 3 months ago
poem
Snpdrgon
18 years 3 months ago
how right you are, my friend.
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