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asiajy
asiajy
Mar 07, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I'm Lost

I'm lost

I wander mindlessly

Ignoring what I come across

Screaming silently

I wander mindlessly

Trying to find my way

Screaming silently

Darkness overcoming day

Trying to find my way

I try and try

Darkness overcoming day

Something creeps slowly by

I try and try

Ignoring what I come across

Something creeps slowly by

I'm lost.

— asiajy, Mar 07, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: Philadelphia, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

I'm Lost

Ninth grade. I'm glad you explained that because I was worried about this piece in comparison to your others. Was going to say that it was too much like so many other works out there. That's the problem with poetry of a personal nature; everyone writes it and it is almost impossible to find a new way to describe. However, I have to tell you that my sixteen year old in tenth grade would probably appreciate ths poem. :) Wasn't ninth grade fun? ~ Ronda
asiajy

asiajy

18 years 3 months ago

yeah

Ninth grade was cool. We had a poetry and creative writing class. I appreciate it more now.
asiajy

asiajy

18 years 3 months ago

P.S

Thanks for the comment. Makes me feel that I've grown as a writer since then.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello asiajy,

If you take out the second "I wander mindlessly" line, I think you will have a good poem here... Keep writing! Always, Cat

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