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Come play this old piano

“I am that old piano…”

You know the one I mean,

That’s propped up pints

On raucous nights…

A drunken, ribald scene.

 

Some found the keys

Beneath my lid

Would play a tune or two,

But there were always other bars

That had a better view.

 

Those tuneless bellows,

tortured chords

And hands like hammer blows.

“Yes, even old pianos hurt,

But nothing ever shows.”

 

Some understanding

Would be nice,

But that’s a different song,

No heavy-handed thumper

Could make me play along.

 

My pedals marked

By hobnail boots,

My ivories cracked and brown,

But I give more in one small note

Than anyone in town.

 

So grace my corner

With your chair

And play me if you must,

It’s better than a silent grave

gathering worms and dust.

 

Play honky-tonk,

Or jazz or blues,

Beat your rhythm on the floor,

Spill your beer, and ash and spit

And stagger out the door.

 

“Do pianos dream?”,

I hear you ask,

Of fingers soft and sweet;

Of Siren sounds and ruby lips

And stockinged, dancing feet?

 

Such hands once found me

all alone,

A smile caressed my keys,

None had ever touched me so,

Voice floating like a breeze.

 

But she mistook me

For her love,

My chords soon to neglect,

She’d played my deepest feelings

Though only danced respect.

 

And every night

at opening time

I search for her in vain

Amongst a throng of faces

Who cannot know my pain.

 

So tonight come play

This old piano,

Before you drink too much,

He’s lost more than you’d ever know,

Please remind him of her touch.

 

— professor, Apr 06, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: China/Sichuan/Chengdu, CHN

Favorite Poets: Yeats, Elliot, Auden, Keats, Shelley, Byron

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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

Keith

As always I cannot find one thing about his poem tha I didnotlike as with all of your poems much thought was spent on the wording Chrys
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Keith

As Chrys says much thought went into this poem. It is the old piano that has all the character. I'll bet there are many tales you could tell and many more still to happen. Excellent poem. Always, Cat
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Ladies

...you can tickle my ivories any day. lol. Keith
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Essi.Daven

18 years 2 months ago

***

Very nice rhythm as well as theme...I like it. Moreover, I love playing the piano :-)
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Playing

Thanks Essi, and you are welcome to play my piano too. lol. Keith :-)
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rider68

18 years 2 months ago

A Great Incarnation Of Yesterdays

A Beautiful Re-enactment of memories past, and a story for Bonus, Although I have had a few Joanna's and got as far as stroking her- My skills won't have left as good impression as your Poem, I love the depth and detail.... Respectfully Peter
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Stroking Joannas

Should have been a caress Peter, lol. Thanks for you appreciation of my playing..Keith
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Rachmaninov

One of my favourites too Anna, although i confess to liking his most famous ones Piano Concerto No2 and Rhapsody on a Theme of Paganini best. Perhaps you better keep your socks on though if you just had 21 inches of snow. lol. Thanks for appreciating my touch though. Keith
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abrelosojos

18 years 2 months ago

my favorite line “Do

my favorite line "Do pianos dream....of fingers soft and sweet" excellent and i like the idea of being someones piano to play.. :) fragile things: take flight!
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Pianos both touched and played

Yes i loved the image of being likened to a piano the moment it occurred to me i must admit, there are just so many ways you can use it to illustrate the effects friends and lovers can have. Glad it struck the right note with you as well. You can of course stop by and play me any time lol. Keith
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

Really good

Beautiful. It like the piano talking about its many experiences seen. Very well done in this poem. Smiles:) Barbara
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Ah, if pianos could but talk....

Thanks Barbara, a rather lighter poem than i am often wont to right but to be frank i enjoyed doing it even though there is considerable pathos in the story line. Keith
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purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

We just threw out an old

We just threw out an old piano that has definitely seen better days. After reading this I wonder if that was wise. As always the flow, imagery and rhythm are flawless and I love the story- brilliant! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Shame on you Kaz

You may just find he comes back to haunt you.lol. Glad you enjoyed the jaunty, flowing style and the story-line. When i wrote it i had the rhythm fixed in my head and although it is quite a simple poem it was not so easy to make it keep it's pace and rhythm up seemingly effortlessly. It needed several revisions I can tell you. Keith
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gwizardstar

18 years 2 months ago

Nice

What a nice flowing poem. Well writen and a warm story to go along with nice choice of words. 10/10 If I never saw the sunshine, I wouldn't mind the rain (Beth Orton)
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Play along then....

since you appear to have a guitar, I'm all for being accompanied. lol. What shall we play? Thanks very much for your comments. Keith
Mark

Mark

18 years 2 months ago

It Got Rhythm

lol I love this Keith ! Gonna start a sing a long tonight :) Thank you, Mark
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Words that make you weep

Although this poem has a very jaunty rhythm and is almost suggestive of a bit of fun i was actually immensely sad when i wrote it and was near to tears as well. Perhaps you can feel that behind my words Anna...and i appreciate that you do. There is of course a very real story behind the notes being played through the words. Keith
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Ancientone

18 years 2 months ago

Like Piano Roll Blues!

Nicely done prof, would recommend a change or two to keep the rythym throughout. In the 5th stanza, try 'giving' in place of "But I give", and in the 10th stanza add the word 'in' before "respect", seems ackward w/o it. Loved it, well done my poet friend. :) Patrick/AO
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Rhythm

Thanks so much for your thoughtful review Patrick, I tried your couple of suggestions but in the end prefer it the way it is. I agree changing to "giving" makes the flow smoother but I actually wanted to create a slight break using "I give" for emphasis. Putting the "in" before respect slightly changes the meaning to one i did not intend but it actually also makes the line into 7 syllables which is often an uncomfortable length...the poem is mainly 6s and 8s with the 6s used to accelerate and the 8s to slow back down. Keith
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Ancientone

18 years 2 months ago

It's your poem....

so do with it as you wish, I mean that respectully, professor. Your poem brings back lots of memories, but will only relate one here. There is a man named Trebor (Robert spelled backwards) Tichner in St. Louis, MO who played an old standup piano as I imagine yours for The St. Louis Ragtimers. The banjo player, Al Stricker called him the professor. He weighed a bit more than you I imagine, around 400 lbs, and was probably the best Ragtime piano player of modern times. An older brother of mine played with them fairly regularly when he lived in St. Louis and they all get together still once in a while. They played at the Old Gaslight Square in the 60s till a fire destroyed many buildings. The Square was shut down after that. Just some nostalgia that I thought you would appreciate. I now understand the meaning you wanted to get across with 'danced respect'. Have a great day, :) Patrick/AO
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Private lives

Thanks Jess....but even old Pianos can have Private lives too, far from the madding crowd. lol. Glad you enjoyed my Public face though. Keith
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LadyTheresa

56 years 5 months ago

Beautiful !

So imaginative and poignantly written! I just lov eit! LadyTheresa
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Poignant

Thanks very much Theresa you can play me any time too. Keith
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cricket

18 years 2 months ago

I feel many things

I could feel many things keith as I read this one. you always have such a beatiful way with ur language use .. and yet I for one can feel the hurt within ur words, (even old piano's hurt but nothing ever shows.) as usual I may be wrong as I can somtimes be,I felt like you were talking about a piano and yet yourself .I could feel the tears as you wrote this .although on the lighter side at times...this one brought me to tears while I read it and I have read it many times each time leaving me in tears..maybe I am overly sensitive huh?lol. but that is what this poem did to me and as I say when a poem evokes a response whether it be joy or sorrow you know it is a good one... this again is another of my favorites..please remind him of your touch.. perhaps this piano has been left alone for to long and needs to be played... to be touched by the hands of one who dreams of a song she would like to play upon his keys ,touching his inner chords. BrownEyesBlue
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Alobar

18 years 2 months ago

When we sold my mother’s

When we sold my mother's house there was this old upright piano there that had long ago become furniture. I let a musician friend of mine take it (and those things are bloody heavy!) and now the scene you described, before it expanded to metaphor, is every other weekend in his home, with his rowdy (but not talentless) friends. I will pass this on to him; who knows, he may put it to music. Wonderful read.
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Written to be played

Thanks Alobar, it was very much written to be played along to so who knows perhaps your friend will find a way. Keith
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

18 years 2 months ago

WOW

This was perfectly crafted from beginning to end. Beautiful, simply beautiful. Thanks for sharing. Tom
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Cryting out for a song

I agree with you Tom, it is just crying out to be made into a song. Thanks for your comments. Keith
Kailashana

Kailashana

18 years 2 months ago

Perhaps the Piano man can

Perhaps the Piano man can come play your old piano. ;-) http://youtube.com/watch?v=c9Uv0wMtaTA&feature=related when we were young we sang any song and the piano played on and on... ~A
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Billy Joel

Brings back memories Anna, and yes that was precisely the kind of song I had in mind. Indeed when you are young almost any song will do, but when you are older only the real touch of an eternal melody will truly light up your keys. Keith
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Calliope

18 years 2 months ago

This had A....

Definate haunting,nostalgia that called out to my heart.It brings to mind a couple of things but one I will share,maybe two, what the hell.First i seem to have a natural ability to play this magestic instrament except I was too poor to follow that path,I would still love to learn how to play ,its not too late,right.The other ,it reminded me of a book I read that connected two people over time,hundreds of years separated them yet this Piece of history changed their lives.It was a lovely story and so is your poem.You are truly talented ,Proff. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Its never too late Lacy

so I hope you get the chance to play, I really do. The book you mention is reminiscent of "Somewhere in time", the film adapted from "Bid time return" by Richard Matheson. If you have not seen the film i recommend that you do even though it was not a big box office success. As it happens in my own personal story there was also a great separation involved and in both space and timing, and past history always has its hand to play in changing the outcome of the present. So there is a haunting nostaligia and i am glad you felt it and that it touched your heart. Keith
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Patricia_legacy

18 years 2 months ago

Loved it

Just goes to show that sometimes the seemingly simple poems can be the best of all. Nothing complicated but a real story with a lot of feeling behind it . I loved this poem it is truly great!
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Simplicity

Thank you Patricia and its true what you say, although often the simple poems are the hardest to write. Keith
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fthillsboomer

18 years 2 months ago

Great Poem and Story

You absolutely hit it out of the park. (American baseball started recently) Rich
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Baseball

Being a Brit I cant say I have been exposed much to baseball any more than you have been exposed to Cricket, but I do understand hitting out of the Park for a home run is pretty much equivalent to being hit for six so i am definitely flattered. lol. Thanks Rich. Keith
Kailashana

Kailashana

18 years 2 months ago

Actually Keith, since

Actually Keith, since EVERYONE who's anyone ;-) was touched by your deft piano fingers, I'd say it was a GRAND SLAM! ~A
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Ah its rugby now

Anna, very sweet and flattering of you to up the ante.....although Grand Slam may be overdoing it a little. lol. We use this term for outright winners in our main annual six nations Rugby tournament but i think it also applies to tennis as well. So what games do you like, if any?. You made me smile so that means you have to as well. Unwritten rule. Keith
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 2 months ago

Prof

Thoroughly enjoyed reading this one ,absolutely wonderful!
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IRENE

17 years 2 months ago

Come play this old piano

you brought back lovely memories of my mother playing on her very old piano ,and my childhood siting watching her ,lovely thank you for that .regards Irene
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Atticus

17 years 2 months ago

Still finely tuned

Extraordinary write. I tip my hat to you Sir. Like many other readers here I can easily hear this pouring through melody from my turntable.....that warm analog room filling sound. Truly great. -ns
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

This is a beautiful write,

This is a beautiful write, the first I've read of yours, and I Loved it. Effortless rhythm, great rhymes and so very emotive. Wonderful job! :) much love b x
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W.C.Wampler

17 years 2 months ago

Play this old piano poem/ comment

Keith, Pianos call me from everywhere they stand. If I'm in a room with a piano, I keep looking at it like a friend I just have to go talk with. Many times, in a bar, in a cafe, at someone's house, I get to do just that. Sometimes jam, or trade off, a song for a song with another songwriter. Your poem is terrific. I have a few pianos myself, and I can almost hear two of them quoting from your poem. Thanks. wcw
professor

professor

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks WCW

Pianos do indeed have a personality and demand to be used...appropriately lol. Glad it struck a chord or two. BW Keith
Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

loved it

LOL thought I'd tag onto the end of this huge conga line and have my say Keith .... Just found this one I love it ... Truely wish I could rhyme like that ... Sincerely JayC
professor

professor

17 years 2 months ago

Oh i am sure you can

rhyme like this JayC. You just need to experiment with other forms than couplets which are very restricting. So happy you loved it. BW Keith
Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Im trying

to experiment a little ... But they dont flow the way yours do I will get one right eventually ..Y'all are going to have to put up with my couplets thingy for a bit longer lol ...I dont need to tell you how good this poem is LOL many others before me have done so ... Sincerely JayC x x
professor

professor

17 years 2 months ago

I am sure with your ear

they will JayC. The secret is to pick the rhyme scheme that best suits your subject and tone. Couplets are often referred to as Heroic couplets and for good reason. If you remember Macaulay and brave Horatio: "And how can man die better than facing fearful odds, for the ashes of his fathers, and the temples of his Gods?" Thomas B. Macaulay You are right though in that it is much harder to write for modern audiences in strong rhyming verse but hopefully it is not a dying art form. Thanks for your comments as always Keith x
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

BRAVO!

It seem superfluous really, everybody has already said it all, so I shall just say BRAVO!!! What fun professor, such lovely things aren't they, pianos. Fabulous poem... I agree with all that good stuff up there. Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 2 months ago

Come play me, your fingers

Come play me, your fingers deft, You are bold, unforgiving my teacher you awaken me that I may know your splendor, feel your movement inside your deepest knowing of me, you are a formidable enemy my love, you wax while I wan and my waves you would churn into typhoon forces, you hold me in the palms of your hands and crush me, just enough to know pain again, just enough to know how to set these bones into form and shape of memory or else I would have disappeared and you would be praying me, Darling let's dance this adagio we have learned so well, I am a smooth stone for your safe keeping you have worn my edges down in the blandishment of your desire my sweet and fierce tantra master, you play me "Für Elise" nimble fingered, make my skin weep for your harmony, your caress consumes me *2005* ~A http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LQTTFUtMSvQ

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