Fusion (mature)

The structure of this caught my eye but I stayed for the story. I have a bad habit of looking for structure first and I initially believed there was a consistently rising structure which, considering the subject matter, would have been interesting. Once I sat back and read the poem, I saw that it had a smooth flow and great feel to it. Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

I like this alot but don't unerstand what fusion is. I look for rhythm first second content and lastly presentation/structure,Cat. I like this all, really no suggestions here or at least not seeing a need for change. Joy and Peace, Mark

are quite the romantic, eh? very nice imagery and feel to this. the phrasing brings just the right delicacy of mood. yours, Niki

I read this yesterday at work but couldn't comment, the environment was all wrong for appreciating such a piece. One needs to be alone or with someone they love (ha ha). Seriously: The line that struck me hardest in this was this one: I am living in your tangible thought of us You can pull this line apart for hours: A lover enters the other's fantasy. Straight up titillation. On and on. But it is the subtle rhyme that accents it just right. Marvelous word-choices there. This line pleased me very much as well: Your spell spins me into finest filament Further, there was some wonderful use of language: "Your spill, ingressive tidal currant" has got to be the most imaginative orgasm I have ever heard (though I think you meant current, right?) I do question the word "hypnostatic". Not a word that I--or Webster's online--am aware of. Breaking it down, it seems to mean suspended in sleep, or floating in dream perhaps. Don't know, can't quite get that line. I don't really have any major suggestions, this is a passionate piece, a fine nearly pornographic (in the highest sense) poem. It flustered me slightly the first time I read it (but I'm sure that was just the environment I was in--should have heeded the word "mature").

Great poem Cat whichever one of these it was (the latter was suggested by your Houston comment) and whichever one of you. lol. Pretty heavy sensual at the end as well Cat, the "spill" imagery was certainly evocative. The only line i am not quite sure about is the last one. The "bits of stardust" reminds me of something rather less ethereal like "bits of sawdust"...in fact the first time i read it i thought it was "sawdust"...sorry obviously too much time spent doing forestry, home improvements and hanging out in lower class drinking establishments when i was younger. lol. Keith

that was good...I had read this before..but didn't comment.. I thought I needed to let it soak in and then read it again... whew...all right.. I have to say I loved it.. the last line for me...works. it is the tiny..sensual kisses of completed ajoining....like stardust kisses... brought together. damn... yes... Cat, this is good.. Fusion.. an excellent title choice.... Richard

This is a very lovely and sensual poem. I absolutely loved reading this! Thank you! LadyTheresa

Very well written, Cat. Not always an easy theme where many shy away and others overdo. A good sensuous poem, this. Yours, Espen