wolfycat

Apr 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Poetic Confession

The all too familiar acrid, acidic, bitter taste of
too old coffee
With an overabundance of french vanilla cream
that fights to lessen the impact
of the tangy bite of it all
Sears my taste buds...
Pleasantly

A comfort, as I try to put into words
that which longs to flow out
of my unsettled soul...
Which, at times, aches to take flight...
As a bird...
Towards the Heavens...
And escape...
never to return

Many nights have passed
with tired, sleepless eyes
And a sleepless heart...
With no explanation at all

I try to deal with injustice and pain...
as if I could do anything about it all,
anyways

For such a supposed advanced civilization...
We rapidly spiral downwards,
In every aspect of society...
We act without taking in the immense picture...
It's Me, Me, Me, Me, Me...
And the Me, Mine society

There is not a damn thing that I can do...
As I sit and take in
the news

I don't want to be a member...
Of the perfect, shiny people club

Some say I can be dark...
I prefer to call it reality.
Life aint' always beautiful, sweetie!

Some say I can be negative...
I say "Look in the mirror" and throw the stone
and let it break on your own reflection

I am only responsible for my little corner
of the world...
But, am I?
Am I not my kindred's keeper?

The weights that drag me down
Threaten to overwhelm me...
At times

So, until I am empowered to perform...
I will write.
This is my power...
This is my drug...
This is my safety net...
You don't have to like it...
Only I do...It belongs to me
You don't have to read it...
You do not have to approve it...
Only I... have to live with myself...

Get it?

Catherine M. Howell
4/13/08

— wolfycat, Apr 14, 2008

About the Author

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Critiques

Kieran Nelson

18 years 2 months ago

Well you put in the stream

Well you put in the stream so I am going to read it and comment, natch! I think it needs tightening up, infact you could stand to lose some parts, or split this into 2 or 3 separate poems on the same theme. One part I would omit, if the only part, is stanza 5, you talk of; "It’s Me, Me, Me, Me, Me… And the Me, Mine society" While a true sentiment that the world is going to the dogs, by including it, in what, I'm sure you'll admit, is a very introspective and self involved poem, you come off as quite the hypocrite. Not to say you are, not at all, but it comes off that way. Hopefully you see my point. My main point however is to tighten it up, it really seems like a train of thought and not a finished piece. I'd pick out the main themes, perhaps separate them and/or expand upon them. Oh, and finally, that last stanza reaks of angsty self importance. Kieran "Mind, how you go!" - Roger McGough's poem for LSD Awareness Week

wolfycat

18 years 2 months ago

You have the right to your opinion...

This is a "venting" poem... And I'm the least 'self-important' person you'd ever meet... but hey, thanks so much for commenting...and leaving your well-thought out opinions:) Seeing how you view my poem...I'd say that the last stanza is for you. Have a great day. Wolfy.

wolfycat

18 years 2 months ago

Oh well...

Oh well, foiled again... My dear husband explained to me that I should not have given life to Kieran's comment because after reading my poem...Kieran responded like a dog that had been hit with a rock...and then I responded like a dog that had been hit with another rock...so sad. All I was trying to do was vent...and truly I do not need to explain myself. After all, we, as poets, have a total right to write about what is inside of our hearts. If Kieran thinks that I am a hypocrite...or self important...well, that's his business:) He obviously does not know me...has never met me...as I have not met, nor known him. I have been judged on here before.:D Best Wishes, Neopoet. Wolfycat.

asiajy

18 years 2 months ago

Maybe

I don't think the above person meant any insult by it, just their opinions. Don't be so easily positioned to strike when someone doesn't understand the point you were trying get across. I didn't see self importance, more like "this is who I am, deal with it," which is cool. But it can be polished to be more poetic and less 'a stream of thought.'

wolfycat

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks...

Thanks, Asiajy... I do not mind critique at all...just when I feel it is on a personal level, which is what I read. I do appreciate what you wrote here. This is good school for me because I need to be able to take insults and let them go in one ear and out the other. I crave constructive critique...not character condemnation. This is why I find it so difficult to correct other's mistakes or writings that come out of another's experiences. You never know where they've been. I see things on here that bother me, even anger me...but I will never know where it came from, or what happened to make a person write what it is that they wrote. So, I refrain...because I really try to understand where they were at the time they penned it. We own what we write...in our very souls. Have a great day:) Wolfy.

themoonman

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Wolfy..

I liked it..it was a rant...and read well to me..except.. it could be tightened up..don't hit me... for example.. this is my power.. you could have left the, this is, out of the next two lines.. this is my power, my drug.. my safety net. and you don't have to like it. just my opinion.. you did well on this piece..enjoyed reading. Richard

wolfycat

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Richard...

Thanks for the critique... I do appreciate it. I also appreciate you taking the time to read my poem:) Have a great evening, Wolfy.

Kieran Nelson

18 years 2 months ago

Wolf I’m sorry if what I

Wolf I'm sorry if what I said came off the wrong way, I was only saying those thigns about the poem, not about you - as you say I've never met you or know anything about you. In any case, I apologise. I do stick by my points, although the last one was a little harsh and unecessary. Kieran "Mind, how you go!" - Roger McGough's poem for LSD Awareness Week

wolfycat

18 years 2 months ago

Kieran...

Everyone needs to rant now and then... Like I said, constructive critique is fine by me...really. Not everyone will like everything that we write. I do not hold anything against you...except I felt you judged me and did not understand where I was coming from... But, it's really okay...really. Have a great??? Not sure what time it is where you're at:) Wolfy.

IKnowNoBox

18 years 2 months ago

When a rant is pened

sometimes the energy invested grafts to the reader and the reaction is "extreme" when some write crash poems they question there own write secretly.When we invite people to Not care with us,as stated I don't want to be a member of the shiny happy people club.... neither do I ...and I will easily tell people something they ask to hear to avoid being mistook for a member.Yes this poem needs review,but it is as stated a rant and at that pre-evaluation it passes the standered it got stars stars that came with a reasoning... constructive.Something that makes the site valuable.Now you know if Kerian reviews a poem of your and gives a good review then it is a review you can validate through retro case. A well written rant poem... i hope your pen is properly exercised for your next post. in ink, Dabbler

wolfycat

18 years 2 months ago

Dabbler...

My pen is a little flabby...but is being exercised. Thank you, my friend. Wolfy.

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