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Fifty Shots (revised)
(Author's note: I received a lot of feedback telling me to put some more fire and anger into this work. Tried to give it some teeth, let me know how it turned out. Many thanks for your reading and comments. ~JLK)
Extra, extra, read all about it.
Be sure you're seated, as you won't believe this.
Released from wrong-doing by the judge.
Their records reflect not even a smudge.
Have you seen the news today?
Bloody cops are sent on their way.
Shouts of "What?!" and "no way!"
Others stood with nothing to say.
Mass riots, brutal fighting.
Screams of the people who had just been violated.
"We thought he had a gun!" they hastily tried to say.
Well tell that to the fucking woman whose husband you just blew away.
Tell that to those children whose father ain't comin' home.
Tell that to the family who is now grieving alone.
No peace for the widow
No explanation to the fatherless kids.
No justification for what those cops did.
With 50 shots those cops took away
A father, a wedding, and a future day.
Of course the race card was given
but the truth remains unhidden
Those shots, they did hit
the cops didn't give a shit
I hope god judges them some day.
Critiques
Frost Smith
18 years 1 month ago
Infinite_Dwarf...
Barbara Writes
18 years 1 month ago
Horrible reality of life
weirdelf
18 years 1 month ago
less guns less death, simple , proven mathematical equation
Frost Smith
18 years 1 month ago
weirdelf...
infinite_dwarf
18 years 1 month ago
Thanks, all!
barbsdad2003
18 years 1 month ago
I think a sticky problem ...
infinite_dwarf
18 years 1 month ago
Chuck....
IKnowNoBox
18 years 1 month ago
I have reviewed this case as it went through various sources.
Amaranthine
18 years 1 month ago
Revealed
infinite_dwarf
18 years 1 month ago
Absolutely
poewriter58
18 years 1 month ago
believe
Frost Smith
18 years 1 month ago
Infinite_Dwarf...
whitetea
18 years 1 month ago
my mind lingers
infinite_dwarf
18 years 1 month ago
Thank you all...
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