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May 16, 2008
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The Long Ago
In long ago and far away
When the all world was soft and bright
We stumbled through each vagrant day
We slept alone each forlorn night And then one chilled sapphired morning
Before a pearled blue gleaming sky
Without caution, angst, or warning
We kissed and bade heartache good-bye. After days of lost half moments
And evenings casting dreams like dice
And drawing plans for life's events
Nothing but marriage would suffice. I had a couch, you had a chair,
Table and plates for daily bread,
Cultlery here and glasses there
But found we still needed a bed. The cupboards then were stocked and full,
The rooms were warm and sown with care,
The bed clad in linen and wool
And life was free from most despair. But fairy tales are not to be
Within a world of dull advice;
How short is an enternity
How quickly fire devolves to ice. So hushed slipped past the weary years,
So lives and loves both atrophied,
So days were filled with hopeless fears,
So love was strangled by grief's seed. And long ago and far away
Have crept from sight and now, instead,
Our seaparate lives in disarray,
I find I still need that damn bed.
ALTERNATE LAST STANZA (based on feedback from the performer)
And long ago no longer sings,
Its crept from sight and now, instead,
With separate lives and separate things
I find I still need that damn bed.
When the all world was soft and bright
We stumbled through each vagrant day
We slept alone each forlorn night And then one chilled sapphired morning
Before a pearled blue gleaming sky
Without caution, angst, or warning
We kissed and bade heartache good-bye. After days of lost half moments
And evenings casting dreams like dice
And drawing plans for life's events
Nothing but marriage would suffice. I had a couch, you had a chair,
Table and plates for daily bread,
Cultlery here and glasses there
But found we still needed a bed. The cupboards then were stocked and full,
The rooms were warm and sown with care,
The bed clad in linen and wool
And life was free from most despair. But fairy tales are not to be
Within a world of dull advice;
How short is an enternity
How quickly fire devolves to ice. So hushed slipped past the weary years,
So lives and loves both atrophied,
So days were filled with hopeless fears,
So love was strangled by grief's seed. And long ago and far away
Have crept from sight and now, instead,
Our seaparate lives in disarray,
I find I still need that damn bed.
ALTERNATE LAST STANZA (based on feedback from the performer)
And long ago no longer sings,
Its crept from sight and now, instead,
With separate lives and separate things
I find I still need that damn bed.
— Pugilist, May 16, 2008
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Jonathan Moore
18 years ago
This is not about me
infinite_dwarf
18 years ago
Jon
whitetea
18 years ago
Poignant.
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