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The Long Ago

In long ago and far away
When the all world was soft and bright
We stumbled through each vagrant day
We slept alone each forlorn night And then one chilled sapphired morning
Before a pearled blue gleaming sky
Without caution, angst, or warning
We kissed and bade heartache good-bye. After days of lost half moments
And evenings casting dreams like dice
And drawing plans for life's events
Nothing but marriage would suffice. I had a couch, you had a chair,
Table and plates for daily bread,
Cultlery here and glasses there
But found we still needed a bed. The cupboards then were stocked and full,
The rooms were warm and sown with care,
The bed clad in linen and wool
And life was free from most despair. But fairy tales are not to be
Within a world of dull advice;
How short is an enternity
How quickly fire devolves to ice. So hushed slipped past the weary years,
So lives and loves both atrophied,
So days were filled with hopeless fears,
So love was strangled by grief's seed. And long ago and far away
Have crept from sight and now, instead,
Our seaparate lives in disarray,
I find I still need that damn bed.
ALTERNATE LAST STANZA (based on feedback from the performer)

And long ago no longer sings,
Its crept from sight and now, instead,
With separate lives and separate things
I find I still need that damn bed.
— Pugilist, May 16, 2008

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Region, Country: Jacksonville area, FL, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Keats, Kipling, Carroll, Yeats, Tolkien, Shakespeare

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Jonathan Moore

Jonathan Moore

18 years ago

This is not about me

I was out last night to hear a friend perform. He's recently divorced and told a story about when he and his wife got together, they had everything they needed, except a bed and when they split, they both had enough for a household, except for a bed. So I sat in the bar last night and sketched out the gross structure of the poem and finished it today and turned it over to him for use a lyrics in a song. We'll see what happens. It's not a serious work but I have to admit, I like the change of pace in the ending. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years ago

Jon

I'm sure your friend would find this to be a good poem. As for the ending, I like your alternate stanza better, though the first does a good job of keeping with the first - the 'long ago, and far away' so I'm torn between the two kind of. ~Jess ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Last night I lay in bed looking up at the stars in the sky and I thought to myself, where the hell is the ceiling??"
whitetea

whitetea

18 years ago

Poignant.

I haven't been married before but divorce still breaks my heart. I've thought about how we struggle against and with the ones we love. Your emotion really came through on this one.

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