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Humble Beginnings

Senryu:

Humble Beginnings

Chilly board houses
with holes and cracks in the walls
hearth blazing shadows




— Barbara Writes, May 29, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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poewriter58

18 years ago

barbara

Good senryu gee I would think that house would be cold and the fireplace a waste of good wood and heat lol Chrys
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DarkinAZ

18 years ago

Just wanted to say hi

don't know what senryu is, but I will take Chrys's word for it and say"well done." Your friend, Mark
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

Hi Mark

Smiles:) Barbara Nice pic of you and you son. Thanks for kinds words Senryu is poetry of human, whereas Haiku is poetry of nature. I tend to mix Haiku with senryu making senryu.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

Thanks Chrys

Smiles:) Barbara I grew up in old home like these until my dad's cousin rented him her moms brick home when I was in my first year of college after two house fires for us and about four for him. You are right, they were cold and we had to hover around the fireplace like at a camp fire in the woods just to get warm. So many quilts to get warm at night we could not move from the weight. We could not toss and turn without getting cold, learn to sleep in one without moving. Five girls sleep in one bed as they were mostly two bedroom houses most times with one bed for the girls and one for the two boys. We would move every year until we were teenagers. Humble beginning I say. These memories inspired me to write this senryu.
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rider68

18 years ago

Very Good

Hi Barbara Because of the simplicity, One would think that this form of Writing has little challenge, (But to try), Then they would appreciate the constraints, structure, and form, and the effort it takes to deliver, Very Good Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

Thanks Peter

Smiles:) Barbara Learning this form of writing was not easy, but a wonderful challenge. In writing this poem It took a couple of days to rewrite and revise making sure its properly structured. I appreciate your take on this.

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