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Oblivious


I think perhaps today I shall be
Well-suited in the absence of any particularity
I will leave my headache behind with my
Genetic composition, immaterial yet all too
Significant in this body’s first degree of separation
I shall endeavor to be impartial, and offer
My throat to the gods high on the portals of clouds,
I am thus subscribed to contrive and alter
A new reality as of yet congealing
Like a few sacred and profane ingredients in a pot,
Like a witch, I cackle, I stir, I brew myself into today’s
State and prove beyond a shadow of a doubt that
It is neither mine nor destiny’s decision nor disposition.
I must have had billions of incarnations as a mosquito
I suppose.

I am seeping into the colour amber,
Resinous, insidious, and
Altogether oblivious.


— Kailashana, May 30, 2008

Critiques

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Mandy

18 years ago

Oblivious

I like this thoughtful, creative and humorous approach... It's as if the 'I', is separate from the body and whilst 'I' can't control the body, it is able to find creative ways of responding, until the final stanza. I love 'seeping into the colour amber' etc... I feel lucky to be on this site. You are a talented poet and this poem makes me more thoughtful and creative. Thank you. Mandy
Kailashana

Kailashana

18 years ago

Thank you so very much!

Thank you so very much! You've made my day;-) It's great to find a medium that one can, at once, *deal* with one's reality in a positive manner, share it with other *kindred souls* and have fun, provide insights and inspirations...and once in awhile have one's heart broken... Are we lucky or what? Love, Anna
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Anna

That is what I try to do when I get a migraine, meditate. Your poem is a lot like one of my meditations :) For other times when meditation will not do the job, there is always Demerol to really take the edge off. But, alas, the latter requires a trip to the emergency room. Thank you for recommending this poem. Always, Cat
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Or like me… long story

Or like me... long story short, I hit my head against the wall to make it feel better. At least that pain was new and nowhere as bad. Demerol? Hadn't heard of that remedy. Must be a new one. A dear friend OD'd on that. Be well Cat. I'm glad my hormones (or the gods) have eased up on me these last few years. Take care, Anna "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine

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