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May 31, 2008
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carved lonely.
"all is fair"
you argue.
your law is on the line,
asking for leave, some quiet stay.
"in love" is more like a trailer than a
summer cabin, portable options
underlined.
"and war" incase you
need it... you say the struggle
is there always, even in
the offering hand,
the dandelions children give.
I consider the view
the way I watch trains.
watching each dull box car,
neon graffiti in corners.
and eye your seat carved lonely,
now an easy chair,
unreadied by winter.
you argue.
your law is on the line,
asking for leave, some quiet stay.
"in love" is more like a trailer than a
summer cabin, portable options
underlined.
"and war" incase you
need it... you say the struggle
is there always, even in
the offering hand,
the dandelions children give.
I consider the view
the way I watch trains.
watching each dull box car,
neon graffiti in corners.
and eye your seat carved lonely,
now an easy chair,
unreadied by winter.
— whitetea, May 31, 2008
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