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Janice Pearce
Janice Pearce
Jun 10, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

In Ink

Penetrate my

virgin flesh

one needle

at a time

probe deep

inside your

dreams

blending

shaded images

borrowed

from my mind

my pain

turns to beauty

as I awaken

to your canvas

for these

tears of ink

will forever be

falling softly

down my cheek

 

 

— Janice Pearce, Jun 10, 2008

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purplemoondoll

18 years ago

I think this is one of your

I think this is one of your best. Wow. I like the structure, language use and flow, it really makes the images come alive. Great writing Janice, your recent work is brilliant. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Kaz

Come on now,You're making me blush! LOL without the feedback from all the special people on this site, I could not grow and learn. Again thank you for your kind words.
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prayersbyPatty

18 years ago

Very nice

Wow is all I can say
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Anna

I want to thank you for taking the time to read this and your comment It means a lot to me~
professor

professor

18 years ago

Great poem Janice

and i agree with all that has been said. There are a number of possible interpretations of your needle and ink and tears imagery and in the end i found myself seeing it as a tatooed teardrop on your face. Akin perhaps to the image of a Pierot. It could be seen other ways of course but just thought i would tell you how it came across to me. Keith
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Prof

Your feedback is always appreciated Prof! Each reader is allowed their interpretation, that's what makes it so much fun heree on this site. Thanks for dropping by~
Kailashana

Kailashana

18 years ago

That’s IT Prof, couldn’t

That's IT Prof, couldn't quite remember... Pierot!! Now I can't remember who (here) has that for an icon... lol. ~Anna p.s. Ronda, you would have been bait for Bukowski with your red hair & blue eyes.
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Alobar

18 years ago

Loved the short lines, the

Loved the short lines, the descending feeling the poem has, also the subtle rhyme. The only thing that sticks with me is the italics for "tears of ink," find they cause me to stumble when I read, rather than accentuate the line. Let the reader feel that line on his own, I think. Alobar (Just my two cents, spend them on gum if you wish.)
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Alobar

As always, I appreciate all your input. Do you really think it would be a better read if tears of ink were not in italics? I am open to this suggestion just don't know if how much impact it would have.
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Alobar

18 years ago

It is a very strong line,

It is a very strong line, central to the poem, but I think it stands out on its own. The italics came off, to me, as superfluous. They caused a slight stumble for me during my first read through--I think because of the short lines--but it was only slight. This is poet's choice, as always, and as no one else seems to have stumbled over the italics, it may just have been me. Like I said, this is just a very minor little thing--I almost didn't even mention it--so I would just go with whatever you feel is right. Again: really good write. Alobar (Just my two cents, spend them on gum if you wish.)
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Catalina

18 years ago

Enjoyed this piece very

Enjoyed this piece very much, feel something like the same kind of way about writing. Thank you for sharing.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Barb

Was it in the spotlight?? I was at work all day looks like another took over LOL Thanks for commenting Barb
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Hi Cat

Once again thank you for your kind words I really appreciate them!
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

Keith nailed it for me,

that is almost exactly my interpretation. I sometimes use Pierrot as my icon. Love this. Great writing. In light of all the comments there seems to be nothing to improve on it. Unless you think so. cheers, Jess
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

is that so rare?

sorry, I have been neglecting a lot of my friends lately, trying to get a balance between new work, interesting newer members and old friends. Surely I have expressed my admiration for your work before, inbetween the caustic comments? cheers, Jess
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Jess

You are a comic too!! Don't remember the admiration part, anyway thanks for your time~
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Ronda

As always, and I have said it before, but thank you for all of your support! [from my heart]
Rett

Rett

18 years ago

Great

Wowsy wowsy woo woo.. yippee and yahoo. This was wonderful. Rett
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Hi Rett

Oh now I am blushing for sure! Thanks for reading, and your comments!
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi Janice...

I believe you have a tatoo or two... enjoyed this poem... well written.. Richard
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Hi Richard

Just wanted to let you know that you are a constant on this site, and I'm sure many appreciate you! Glad that you enjoyed this one~
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prayersbyPatty

18 years ago

everytim

Everytime I read this poem, I get a different perspective on the meaning, I guess thats why this poem is so great!
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DarkinAZ

18 years ago

well,

The first two lines would pull any man in. I like this, to me it is a poem of a girl who recieved a tatto memorializing a past love who she still deeply cares for. I loved it! Sincerely, Mark
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Mark

The first two lines pulled you in?? What was I thinking??LOL Thanks Mark for your kind words I'm glad you loved it!~
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rider68

18 years ago

Beautifully writen

Hi Janice.... All the magic ingredients, senaual beautiful, loved it, Congrats...Very well deserved on spotlight, Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Peter

magic, sensual, beautiful, wow what a compliment thank you so much Peter I appreciate your thoughts~!
Mark

Mark

18 years ago

Awesome

Just Awesome, Janice, and I wish now I was here sooner after reading the first few lines so many times ;) Mark
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Hello there!

Thank you for taking the time to read this, and your comment. As always, appreciate the feedback!
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Mark

Didn't draw you in, like it did for the other Mark?? Your comments are so much appreciated Mark thanks for reading the whole piece!
Mark

Mark

18 years ago

Are ya kidding? lol

Every time I open Neo I read the teaser, just needed to move on fast as it certainly held me 'til finally read - business ya know :( Mark
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Synchro

17 years 12 months ago

This is just a fine little piece

and tied up so nicely at the end. I am more and more becoming an admire of succinct verse, and this is the kind that draws one in, saying, aha, there is a breathing person here, and despite the lack of punctuation (which is always a block for me) the tone is no artifice at all...just the real stuff. Congratulations. Yours in peace, Synchro
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 12 months ago

Synchro

WOW thank you for the compliment, as always thanks for dropping by!

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