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Velvet Flux

Velvet Flux

 

infused by your inspiration

reciprocal fluid elocution

of synchronized harmony

Waltzing to the music's heartbeat

we would drift and glide on laughter

dancing attendance on physical syntax

teaching our traumas to slumber

caught in the center of our universe

until touched by your migrant spirit

I neither lived nor breathed

existence within narrow boundaries

unimaginable loneliness defined me

you crossed my impenetrable barriers

transformed this apathy of being

rescued me from bitter soul-death

my stunted reality of quiescent cynicism

a spiritless and comatose creature

like a kiss of redemption to a condemned man

bewitched am I gladly compliant

by your grace I am exonerated

my incarnate miracle Electra

 


— Candlewitch, Jun 23, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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professor

professor

17 years 11 months ago

The waking of both body and soul

by a migrant challenging spirit drifted into your life Cat. It is all too easy to fall asleep or lead a life of blunted appetite. A beautiful tribute to someone I feel. Always Keith
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

Keith

I'm afraid it is a remembrance from a time of long, long ago. Glad you liked it. Always* Cat
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poewriter58

17 years 11 months ago

Cat

perfect! this is so applicable at this time I don't see where I could suggest anything to make this any better Chrystalie
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rider68

17 years 11 months ago

Cat i thought you were Resting

Cat I thought you were Resting, not eating Dictionaries, Very creative.........still digesting......Brilliant, Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

LOL

Peter, that is restful, too, eating dictionaries! Thanks so much. Always, Cat
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

At first reading I took in

At first reading I took in no meaning, the music of the words carried me, but left me with strong feelings. On 2nd and 3rd readings I got what you were saying. In 21 lines you achieved what most novelists fail in several thousand. Superb and moving. cheers, Jess
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

Jess

Three readings, wow, I am really flattered that you took the time to read my poem that many times. Thank you for your words of praise. Always, Cat
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

At first reading I took in

At first reading I took in no meaning, the music of the words carried me, but left me with strong feelings. On 2nd and 3rd readings I got what you were saying. In 21 lines you achieved what most novelists fail in several thousand. Superb and moving. I couldn't improve on the title cheers, Jess
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Cat!

I happen to really like the title. 'scuse me while I go run for my dictionary... lol! I have no idea what this is about, so will have to read through again for the greater meanings. :~) ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine!"
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

LOL!

Sorry to have confused you, lol! But thanks for reading and letting me know you were here. Always, Cat
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barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

It's so cotton-pickin' ...

hard to improve on your wordcrafting, I won't even try. (Too much respect for myself to engage in such folly.) Thanx again, Chuck
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

Chuck

Awww, that was so very sweet of you to write! Always, Cat
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orgami

17 years 11 months ago

swift like the beauty of midnight freights

running to carry a freedom found new day running to remember someone long distant their shadow engrained passionately on my leathered hand maps my experience worn Your poems surprise me like my travels (not as train hopper) but car rider waking from slumber to see a beautiful world alien and wonderful slipping past like the tilt of a glowing galaxy although I dont know the words you speak they are like magic talismans I mouth thank you for sharing your remembrance of this special person
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

Orgami

Thank you for your wonderful words to me. They are like a beautiful poem in their own right. Always, Cat

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