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Agreement

  

I disagree with you
and you with me
over what?
we have the same needs
Water, food, shelter, love
so what is wrong?

Are you a jingoist?
(extreme patriotism in the form of aggressive foreign policy)
I want for all of us
do you?
how to redress these differences?

There is something else,
not need or want,
no different in nature than a drunk’s plonk
or a junky’s needle.
It’s called power.

I look at the facts and see
Abundance for all,
it’s plain to see.
Corporate dicks,
impotent but for their power to hurt
Cause this shameful waste.

I could make a list in face of,
oil
wasted food
World Bank debt
puppet juntas for USA profit.
I don’t speak in blame,
I profit.
But would like not to.

I feel the need to address with haste
this stupid, stupid, ignorant waste
We all agree,
its plain to see
there is plenty for all.

Who disagrees?
Power junkys of course.
How do they persuade us?
By making us believe in greed.
Though I won’t attack a particular creed,
original sin’s a nasty thought indeed.
Perpetuated on all who believe
that we are greedy.

Give me water, food, shelter and love
I will do all I can to make them for myself
and share the rest.
You would too
if put to the test

This I will say,
my deepest belief,
we are good enough now if we choose to be,
unless we wait till death for forgiveness.
Which will be too late.


 

— weirdelf, Jun 28, 2008

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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DarkinAZ

17 years 11 months ago

Superb Write,

I really like how you spoke throughout this whole piece, respectful, yet authoritive, in the presence of a worldwide crowd you made your case well, with dignity and compassion. Your friend, Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

thankyou Mark

this is the most seriously personal piece and most thought out I have posted in a while. So probably the worst poetry. Forgive me. I had a need to say. cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

Greed

Smiles:) Barbara If being satisfied with just substance was enough for those controlling the system, We would be better off.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

Fatous

Smiles:) Barbara Learn a new word here. I had to look it up, shows how unintelligent I am NOT. System to me means this world we live as it is today for who? well everyone living is affected by it. Starvation, the working class work hard for pennies while the wealthy build storehouses. There's something about a man I love that makes me NOT say what I think of you at this moment. Thanks for commenting Jess, I appreciate your honesty and the fact that it never changes.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

my opinion changes quite often

as I learn new things. Sorry if my tone was insulting. Like I said, knock me on my back. But do it with truth, not just feeling and especially not with indoctrination. I want you to think. cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

Opinion changes

Smiles:) Barbara You are an insulting person. It is you nature from what I can see. You seem to strive on having no feelings. I guess it works for you. Me I have feeling. Still not telling you what I THINK of you. Apology accepted, though is what I expect from you when there is a misunderstanding or differences that conflict. Happy to know your opinion of me has change. Cheers
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

indoctrination

Smiles:) Barbara I refer my comment from what I remember from my Bible reading and political understanding. indoctrination is not me. Since I do not debate religion or politics, I say what I feel and believe. Not expecting anyone else to agree with me. Cheers
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Jess

Ah yes, everyone has an opinion and you stated your's quite well.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

Come on Janice, you can do better than that!

You can see I was looking for an engagement, argument, or even fight with this poem. Tell me what you really think. You believe exploitation and war is god's will for this world? Do you think we can do better? Perhaps even rebuild the tower of Babel, if we make ourselves good enough? Jess
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DarkinAZ

17 years 11 months ago

Jess,

For someone who does not believe in "original sin or the Christian God" you sure go on the offensive alot, why does a ficticous God bother you so much, consume you, breed anger in you,If I do not believe in something I simply pay it no mind. You seem to have a brick at the ready 24/7 for a God you say does not exist, if he does not, set the brick down my friend. You did so well keeping it couragle in the write, comments getting a bit heated. Your friend, Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

Wow.

This feedback has hit me far harder than I expected the poem to hit. Where to start? I respect all of you so will just go in order. Mark got the point. Barbara I was really disturbed by your response. Yes I am a troublemaker, and yes I sometimes hide my feelings behind humor or science, but I thought everyone saw past that. I do feel, very strongly, maybe you are the one person to acknowledge me hiding that way. It makes feel me a lesser poet, less honest. Wow, this poem has made me look at me when I thought it might help change the world. I still hope you will all do look at the truths there, while I go back inside for a while. Janice I await your response. cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

Jess

Smiles:) Barbara Sorry my response disturbed you, I knew that of you earlier on and felt your pain, but did not want to thread. You are still a great poet and a honest one in my book. Now I feel bad. I can change me, but not the world.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

Oh, forgot to answer that

original sin or the Christian God bothers me simply because so many accept it without questioning it. It is what a lot of my poetry is about. I simply spend so much time on it because there are such devastating life consequences on not questioning it. For life and the planet itself. About here and now, what we do. What was last line of this poem? "unless we wait till death for forgiveness. Which will be too late." cheers, Jess
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Jess

Will not banter with you about religon.This site is for poetry,and our development and growth in it. Argument about religion would serve no purpose here!
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Well Jess...

really enjoyed your poem and agreed with most of it.. except for the greed part... although most of the human race are no more than sheep doing what they are told and believing all they are taught, there are some of us that stand alone.. the power hungry dicks that control most of the wealth in this world would have us believe there is nothing we can do, but like you, I believe there is enough for everyone here.. the problem is taking control from the very greedy.. because I do believe we, and all life forms, are ultimitly greedy.. if it came down to your neighbor or you... who would you choose? that is the only thing I disagree with because even if we took control of all the resources.. who would we put in charge.. and how to keep them from getting too greedy... very interesting poem.. thoughtful and enjoyed the comments.. this poem and comments took me way out there.. sorry for rambling.. Richard
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

Aye, there's the rub

would you really see your neighbours go without? I don't think so. That is the power addiction I referred to. cheers, Jess
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

thought is all I ask

have gone back inside and still decide that certain religious creeds make people accept unacceptable suffering. cheers, Jess
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

LOL, right on the mark! Dabbler

they are already strip-mining people. The serious question is who is doing it and how to stop them. To put it utterly simplistically, Corporations do it and religion allows it. I am starting to see why Noam Chomsky wrote whole books. But what could I ever say that he hasn't already? Just another poet wolf howling in the wilderness, but my brother and sister wolves answer! cheers, Jess
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purplemoondoll

17 years 11 months ago

Who disagrees? Power junkys

Who disagrees? Power junkys of course. How do they persuade us? By making us believe in greed. Though I won’t attack a particular creed, original sin’s a nasty thought indeed. Perpetuated on all who believe that we are greedy. This verse really hit home. Power is the route of most of the evils of this world IMHO and I do agree with your statement here about making us believe in greed. I am not convinced that everyone succumbs though - especially here where I live (in a rural village) we are not so caught in the ratrace/destructive spiral and values are a little different. Like moonman I like to think I can and do where possible stand up to the power junkies - albeit through poetry or the job I do. This is very very well thought out Jess - as always you made me think and thats why I love your poetry. Do we do enough? Hmm I am not so sure Thanks my friend for giving me something to really think about this morning. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

Kaz, I'm not sure why

But I felt very judged and attacked on this poem. Thank you for understanding, we can all do only what we can, even when it seems meaningless. The alternative is to lie down to an arbitrary power, like nation, corporatism or god. You truly brought tears to my eyes with your understanding. Other comments tried to demean me as a feelingless troublemaker. I am a troublemaker, but never feelingless. You know that. Thank you. Jess
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rider68

17 years 11 months ago

Throught Provoking

Jess My thoughts are this, God forbid that we should allow, if given the choice for religion to take centre stage once again, although powerful and still very influential, they don't dictate, and control as once they did, But there are extremists, who would love to have that return, Man by nature is materialistic; success is so often expressed in the acumination of wealth, there’s a big difference between the guy that works hard to amass his little empire, and corporate’s that have destroyed peoples way of life, taking away choice and individuality, Look at the food chains, days by day quality gives way to mass produce, growers being Ostracized, being squeezed out of business, then dictatorship steps in, voices of individuals scrummed, to back door dealing indorsed by local and central government. It takes a brave man to stand in his beliefs, so on this note I applaud your writing and taking a stand in your belief’s, Sadly a lot of people state that they aren’t sheep, but like most do nothing, and end Up following, Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 11 months ago

Jess

I think you are confused, God (lower case denotes satan) does not cause suffering, it is the love of worldly things and thus I agree that the rich are not following the teaching. The teaching is to share. Most Christian religions are now the people that are there when disaster strikes. When the government shows up that is the military. A whole different ball game. But satan roams the earth seeking those he can devour by tempting them with greed, lust, and power and money. It is easier for a camel to go through the eye of a needle than a rich man to enter into the kingdom of God.(Luke 18:25).I am sorry, but I had to comment to make sure the truth of this matter is revealed. Are corporations corrupt YES. Are all people corrupt Not all. And even if a country seems corrupt, there are people in that country that care for their fellow man. All in all, I liked the poems idea and I appreciate the theme. All the disaster in the world comes from sin. And all the rich corporations or any countries who contribute to waste will answer for their part. There is enough to go around, but there is waste. On that point I agree, but as Janice said this is not a debate site and I am sorry to add to it. Hollywood is not America. May I suggest you find a debate site to go to.I think you might enjoy it. Hope you take this in the right way. I did think this was one of your better poems, I see plenty of anger at the injustice in this world, that gets to me too. One last point I would like to get off my chest. All this talk of taking drugs and suicide disturbs me. There are so many people who have cancer, heart problems, etc and they want to live for their children who need them, if you don't like your life would you share and give it to them? You see my daughter has cancer and has two children 8 and 12 and who knows how long she will be in remission? Patty
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orgami

17 years 11 months ago

When the gold chariot comes by

I love people who stir lifes general purpose A guy called Paul long ago did this and got be-headed but if it wasnt for him "selling" a concept "Christianity" may have not become prominent as quickly as it did And in time there were others whom thought they would set up systems that could possibly last a few years but failed after twelve and something called Divine Wind was swallowed up by fire and B-29 bombers dropping incendiaries on cities made of wood and paper flown by young men who believed in the right to bear arms and believed in God Apple Pie and America (and at that time Brand Names) Most of production was still not yet done with complete synthesization and reliance on slave labour by mostly foreign trade was acceptable I cannot afford to buy a hundred dollar pair of shoes made in this country I would love to own Lands End clothes they last forever NOT like the child produced items by people who may not even have faith in a God like we understand My ten dollar sweater fell apart in less then five months and my ten dollar shoes were trash in a seasons turning we only seem to create wars that last forever and ideals that say we must own brand name including brand name GOD what if I believed in Muhummad?? or chose to and was writing my poems to him what if I believe in the Creator Forgiveness when I die all i can afford is a cardboard box and theres nothing like a good Weyerhauser box but I'll probably get an easily affordable Wal-Smart made by someone getting nickels by the hour and burning incense who may even not even believe in the God of this North American War machine I bet my chariot when it comes for me will be a gas moped with side car and St Peter while be a Syllabic assexual being and if all else fails shovelling coal for the furnaces of hell can be my work (there must be lots of this going on because the world is heating up a lot lately) Mr Weirdelf my freind I greatly enjoy your opinion and poems and I too have included my Sunday comment to you and I even know who Chomsky is
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orgami

17 years 11 months ago

On last note about Cancer

My mom died of cancer her mother died of cancer a lot of freinds passed and yes drugs and addictions suicides are consuming people like the spread of disease like the pain of cancer but I've seen miracles they walk amongst me here and in these poems here on this site helpful critical and controversial I have read shinning examples of hope faith and good will in all acts of desperation and gratitude of plenty and its the openess of this site in which we can create craft and converge what is in us what stirs us convects our souls the troubles too its what makes Poetry what it is the voice of others to be lent extolling reaching cursing sometimes questioning believing even I believe in Neopoet for the moment its my chemotherapy for all dark places within anyway just my thoughts Ive gone on too much Love the reaction Weirdelf has stirred creative concoctivity
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frangipangi

17 years 11 months ago

poetry or power

No Jess, your poetry was not the highlight here, but the power of your words and the valiant and compassionate, warrior heart behind them is. Your words caused us all to think and made our souls stir within. You've done your job writer, made us SEE until we puked or rebuked; cried or sighed; rejoiced or voiced. Agree or disagree, all certainly were touched. Great write,THANK YOU Yours, Fran
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you Frangi,

I am touched. I play with fire a lot, and often get my fingers burned. So it goes, just keep on on putting out those flames with gasoline! cheers, Jess
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MEL

17 years 11 months ago

Wow...

Mel Inwood I got so caught up in the comments that followed I forgot what the Poem was about... (scrolls back up to read it again...) To me, it is about being greatful for what we have in life, and not get swept up into the crazy power driven world. There's alot of greedy people out there... I am not materialistic.I am greatful for everything in my life...especially the love of my boys..my family and closest friends. That's what your poem meant to me?? Straight to the point! Mel
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Ashfae

17 years 11 months ago

What can I say that’s not

What can I say that's not hypocritical? we are good enough now if we choose to be God, I hope so.
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SLoEDdie

17 years 10 months ago

phew

the last two lines made me sweat, I see what you mean. it made me think and open my eyes. great poem, I now will no longer ask for forgivness but earn it. thanks for the poem wierdelf ed
PF

Poetic Fluffer

17 years 10 months ago

Mr. Americana

Mr. Americana, Mr. Patriotic, Mr. I Love America... I applaud you, I love this damned country myself. Your last stanza gave it the hit and power I expected to get from you work. I'm not one to write about politicking or such, i'm impartial--and leave it to votes and praying, I am your humble PadWan, great piece. The world would be a better place if we lived by our means, and live not as wastrels in pools of cologned fitness water... ~Pfluffer~

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