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Thor's Gift To A Child


If I were a child,
I would be free to discover
my inner Pokemon
alas, I’m too old for new landscapes
to recognize,
besides
all I have at my disposal are these marching
soldiers of time,
hup one two three, hup, one two three!
drill sergeants biting the dust in an ever-expanding desert, carrying
a full metal jacket —
100 pounds of
vicissitudes and fortitudes
regiments in boxed-up metaphors
I learned at the feet of history,
catacombs
and honeycombs sometimes lost,
sometimes melting in the womb of love,
or in the nightmare of its denial.

Gabriel, come blow your horn!

Break down
these walls of isolation and return me to the time
of orange blossoms when knighthood was in flower
and I, a princess banished to the dark tower by
three wicked Norsemen like the Kings of the Orient
each bearing the thunder of Thor
and the sweet song of a siren

must learn to cross my own river of fire.


— Kailashana, Aug 31, 2008

Critiques

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rider68

17 years 9 months ago

Hi Anna

Hi Anna even in time's of tormoil, you find words, beautifully scripted, such depth, loved the metophers, Hoping for better time's to come my friend, Be well & take care........Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

Hi Peter, my dear friend.

Hi Peter, my dear friend. Have you been to the States recently to see any of the EOTS? I remember Michael wrote some amazing stories. Wish I still had them. Alas, I lost more than a year's worth of poems and email correspondence. I hold Wayne, all closely in my heart. My first on-line *family*. ;-) I remember Joni with much love...and a all-too-familiar aching. Love. ~A
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

Thor is a warrior,

not a soldier/mercenary. Huge difference to me. Warriors protect and defend when peaceful means are exhausted. I regard nyself as a spiritual warrior. Even that is a last resort. And that boomerang hammer is so cool! cheers, Jess
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

You’re wayyyyyyyyyyyyy too

You're wayyyyyyyyyyyyy too funny Jess... Yes, I've considered myself a spiritual warrior(ess) a wounded healer, a Goddess, a Lover, a Fool, A Cosmic Dancer, a Geisha, a Samurai,a mad-woman, and no-one special at different times of my life. Now I seem to have integrated them into one persona. Better late than never...;-) Jess.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

yikes! all in one?

I practice time/spiritual management. Thor, pagan, poet, warrior, healer, definitely fool (especially in the Tarot sense) and above all Monkey! The nature of Jess is irrepressible! Oh, I mix and match but it gets confusing, probably where my best poetry comes from. mmm, haven't tried Geisha yet. Revel in the chaos Dance to the divine complexity of the universe Those who don’t live at the edge take up too much space cheers, Jess
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Hi Anna...

this poem reminds me of my childhood.. back then all we had were those plastic army men.. I remember the impact on my imagination when I first discovered Thor, in comic books at first but then even as a young boy found myself consuming any and all I could find about the Gods... imagination is what this child got... loved your poem.. you get such great responses to your poems...it is a joy to be here.. Richard
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

Anna

This is good imagination. I watched my granddaughter ( the one with special needs) at play yesterday, and she is beginng to develop her imagination, and it was so delightful to watch. She was Olive Oil of all things, calling to Popeye for help and called Bluto a Heel. Creativity is a gift of the mind, and you have that gift, Anna
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

Linda, perhaps it is an

Linda, perhaps it is an integrated gift of mind and heart. The greater the heart, the more the will to be imaginative no matter the challenge, as evidenced by your granddaughter. And my favourite popeyeism is: I Yam what I Yam... Smile. ~Anna

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