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BRING YOUR OWN GLOVES

Bring Your Own Gloves

 

 

The profile clearly stated,

“Can we live a little?”

Did you tell them,

Bring your own gloves?

 

For the weeding of that garden

And the washing of those pots.

 

The profile clearly stated,

“Solvent & Good looking”,

Looking for the same

I clearly remember, you?

 

For the buying of that ephemera

And the cooking of that food.

 

Equally happy in a pub,

In your dressing gown,

On the couch.

The cinema outings sparse?

 

For the crying of that woman

And the heartbreak of that spouse.

 

 

Ellie LaCrosse

— panaella, Sep 08, 2008

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whitetea

whitetea

17 years 9 months ago

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this is the first poem I've read of yours you are a good writer. I will need to read through your work before this.
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Arrow

17 years 9 months ago

Disappointed expectations -

the feeling comes through loud and clear. I might structure it a little differently - with the personal ad lines first, broken by "Looking for the same . ." then ending with all he didn't say and she didn't foresee. But, that's just me. The goal's well accomplished.
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panaella

17 years 9 months ago

Personal ads...

Thanks Arrow, It's my commentary on the disparity between need & expectation...you've cleverly picked up on that! I borrowed a line from my own persoanl experience...first date..."bring your own gloves, we're weeding my garden!" Downhill from there really! Ellie.
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Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 9 months ago

Bring Your Own Gloves

Panela, Bring Your Own Gloves is an exquisite poem - heartrending and enveloped in gloom. Use of metaphors is brilliant. I have nothing but praise for it. Mohammad

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