Eduardo Cruz

Sep 28, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mere Mortal

I hear whispers, that call
to me from an unrecognized
place, luring me with words
of smooth tender, inviting pleasure.

Words that are those of a skilled
magician, softly caressing and
mesmerizing.

Leading me to a place beyond
ecstasy, ascending to a level of
euphoria,

Finally collapsing into a mound
of incomprehensible feeling.

Rising searching for that magic,
but it is not mine.

The words belong to those who
can spin, and not to mere mortals,
like me.

— Eduardo Cruz, Sep 28, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

Critiques

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Nice write

Smiles:) Barbara A poem of love and all its passionate feelings at its peak. is what I seeing. beautiful expressions. really good image.

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Poetry

Hey Barbara, Congrats on the election!! This is love and passion, but for poetry from some one who is just a novice, But finds it in other real poets. wishing he could write that way. That person is me. "do as the once barren tree: flourish, and as the planted seed: rise" Jose de Diego"

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Thanks for the congrats

Smiles:) Barbara appreciate your support, sometimes we are real poets and not be aware. you are one of them a real poet. this piece piece show your true talent for writing thats what I think.

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Not me!!

Dear Barbara, I'm just a novice, but thank you so much for your more than generous Comment. How's your handsome doing, I want to see an updated photo. Thanks again, Eddie

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Thanks for the congrats

Smiles:) Barbara Happy for the opportunity. Looking forward to working with everyone. Appreciate your support, sometimes we are real poets and not be aware. you are one of them a real poet. This piece piece show your true talent for writing thats what I think.

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

A beginner with talent

Smiles:) Barbara My handsome is great. He feel like a miracle every time I hold him. Update coming soon. Thanks for all your kindness.

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Eddie

I enjoyed this one, nicely done! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Janice

thank you so much for your comment, I'm happy you enjoyed Eddie

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Eddie

Your choice of formatting really helped with the "readability" (I really should start my own dictionary!) of this work. Good message within: we're always subjected to temptation - it's what makes us human. Excellent write. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "If you've ever emptied the back of your pickup truck by driving backward really fast and slamming on the brakes, you might be a redneck" - Jeff Foxworthy Bill Engvall: "that's how we moved"

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Hey Jess,

thanks for picking up on the message. I always enjoy when you stop by. What happen to "Hard Cord" Thanks again Jess, Eddie

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

:~(

Hardcore gummi bear was eaten. Actually, I was thinking about how many people commented, and said they liked this picture. Makes me smile, so it'll stay. I must say, it captures a lot of moods. Dad K. did good..... (he took it when I wasn't looking.) ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "If you've ever emptied the back of your pickup truck by driving backward really fast and slamming on the brakes, you might be a redneck" - Jeff Foxworthy Bill Engvall: "that's how we moved"

purplemoondoll

17 years 8 months ago

Enchanting, smooth flow and

Enchanting, smooth flow and very well thought through. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Wow!

Enchanting, I love that word. Some where along the line I forgot that word, thanks for reminding me, and for your comment. Kaz thanks for stopping by, Eddie

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