Teenage Dreams 4

my people have this proverb goes thus:the waist always bear the pain of an energetic dance. chasing your dream takes a lot of energy; mistakes are made,bad people are encountered,good people are also met,but the most important thing is to land successfully.grap the moon before you land... akabeks

Barbara I am stunned, this work is just awesome. I don't know if I want to own it, not in the covetousness sense but in an integrating sense, or if it has come to own part of me. I shit you not, this sequences of poems has altered irrevocably my view of the world. Not shatteringly- subtly, hauntingly and beautifully. This is poetry at its spiritual best, more universal than my earlier comments suggested. I don't know if there is more to come, I trust your feelings about that but I urge you, whether it is complete now or when you feel it is, to paste them all together and submit them as one poem. My only structural crit is that through several parts there are switches in tense, from past to present and present participle (-ing). note My deluge had recede My deluge had receded cheers, Jess "They that can give up essential liberty to obtain a little temporary safety deserve neither liberty nor safety" Benjamin Franklin, wonder what he would think of the Patriot Act.

This one is awesome. Ranks above my one of giant spiders riding flying Pizzas! Teenage dreams can be a real nightmare. No pun intended. Respectfully, Rett: "A man convinced against his will, is of the same mind still" Unknown