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vignettes

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they were drawn to each other
flames of passion burning through
10000 wounds
ages and millennia
cave and mountain
seas of broken ties
ebon stars and cyan sky
between them,
he was an angel of Paradise
she was a temptress to be slayed
he worshipped the ground she walked on
and so would kill her in his unfathomable heart.

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he was her only obsession
nothing could save her
from his light
but she danced on pointed toes
in her little pink ballerina gown
he would open her
and the music box
played on and on.

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she was empress of the wind,
she alone loved his stories and
loved his animal hunger
willing to cast herself
from cliffs of jagged white
she stood
poised
to dive further into his heart,
he was the salt of the earth,
she was empress of the wind.




— Kailashana, Mar 18, 2009

Critiques

Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Oh hail to thee Empress of the wind

Diving and visiting musical boxes, Paradise, flames of passion and animal hunger, we are spared for nothing in this explosion of fantasy, salted jagged white cliffs and she diving even further into his heart, oh just shipwreck me on this island of the imagination and I will take part too. Anna, Anna you send us to the wilds and back again, lovely fun Ann of Norway.
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

I really enjoyed this

I really enjoyed this powerful love story, such wonderful imagery painting painfully beautiful pictures in my head! much love b x

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