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Slower waves rolling

Waves wash me sweeterWater rolls, flowingOcean to meet meDrinking clouds, glowing Lost equilibriumTight rope slipped wordsLined up on tiptoeLike restless perched birds Philosophy seeks meI cannot denyI float in the etherBeyond land and sky I hear your nobility - so sweet your humilityI’ll meet you there - You and I knowLife fuels the care - I feel where you go Sink in my velvet

Some potion of loveThe ocean below youThe mountain above Slow, slowed and slowerSlip under my skinSurprised by my heartThat I might let you in
— Cloudthings, Mar 25, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets: So many... Rumi, Spike Milligan, Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan, past & present. A myriad of song writers, Dylan, Jackson Browne, Lior, & I must add the poetic influence of painters, sculptors & creators across the world... Life really, especially the sky.

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Ink Dragon

17 years 2 months ago

Anni,

another awesome piece. I love how you make your rhyme seem effortless here, almost casual. The images your poem evokes are simply beautiful. Yours, ~Nina
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Oh thank you Nina, I think

Oh thank you Nina, I think praise from you is precious, you are a discerning woman & knowledgable regarding poetry. Is the painting yours by the way? Like the look of it, seems to have a rich texture too, be lovely in the flesh. Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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Ink Dragon

17 years 2 months ago

Yes, Anni,

the painting is one of mine. Glad you like it, and I, too, wish I could show you the real painting. It is called "Fire" and belongs to a series of paintings I did on the elements. Yours, ~Nina
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Oooh yes I get the fire, & I

Oooh yes I get the fire, & I know you never get the same impact you do up close & real. Such a topical subject here too, that fire. You've done well even with this little image I can het the fire element strongly. I envy you, I long to paint more, so many things I do there is no room, I keep wanting to make it, but some other project takes precident... So my friend, perhaps you can paint for both of us. I admit to a desire to see the other elements you have portreyed, I am SO in love with water... and in a way air too, since that really is the sky predominently. & earth is always apealing. I am off to see if you have painted any "Wordy" portraits of late now. Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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Ink Dragon

17 years 2 months ago

Anni,

congrats on Spotlight! And I will try to put up the water painting next. Yours, ~Nina
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Ta, feels odd, 3 poems in a row in spotlight, but I feel honoure

Ta, feels odd, 3 poems in a row in spotlight, but I feel honoured that other great writers might feel inspired to put them there, & am learning to tweek my work more too. Looking forward to seeing the water painting. Off to work, but will go search your latest soon Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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barbsdad2003

17 years 2 months ago

Impressive!

I like this! The spareness of words lends power. Thanx, Chuck PS: The fifth stanza needs a line space insert after the first line of it, if you can manage the fix.
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Chuck!

Yes, that's more your style, I know what you mean, it's tricky though. I'm such a verbose thing, so much to express about everything, love to be more succinct like you. When are we getting a new spring write from you? Yes, don't know how that spacing thing happened, think there was a word change after I pasted, auto change that didn't show up in preview. Srill learning to navigate this site. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
professor

professor

17 years 2 months ago

Effortless rhyme indeed

Anni and full of poignant imagery and effective alliteration. The only part that threw me slightly was in the first verse where you start with water imagery from the oceans and then switch in the last line to clouds and dew imagery on fields of clover. I guess i was expecting you to continue the first extended ocean metaphor so it did not quite work for me. As always just telling how it came across to me. All the best Keith
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Please I always apreciate the feedback & thank you

Well, thank you so much, I am running late but wanted to quickly say thanks... Yes that last line in the first stanza, I see it might jar, it used to have more words about the ocean meeting me like the horizon meets the land where I lay between drinking the clouds from the clover... will have to pllay with it I think... You are right to point it out as a discrepancy I have the connection in my head, you guys don't. I must run, apreaciate the feedbak Keith will tweek this tonight if I get time, late for work! Love your icon by the way guess there's a story to it. Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Maybe that’s better now?

Maybe that's better now? Love to know your thoughts for the change, changed the scene a little... letting go of the "babies"! ta Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
professor

professor

17 years 2 months ago

Humm Anni

you aren't going to like me much but this still does not work that well for me. Not sure i can see clouds glowing and the break in the second line spoils the flow and then it doesn't link with line three so well. How about something like: Waves wash me sweeter Water roll flowing Ocean to meet me Drinking clouds glist'ning Only suggestions as always All the best Keith
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

I do apreciate your time & your perspective. Will sleep on it

Hi Keith, not at all, I don't base my fondness on critiques of my poems, in fact I am grateful for feedback, it IS all opinion, but it may help me learn to be a better writer. In the least it gives me feedback as to how they may be received. I think I understand your point & I have tried just removing the hyphon to see if that feels better. Your suggestion is sound, but it completely removes the rhyme in the first stanza & would not fit with the rest of the poem (maybe a throwback to song writing) I COULD try: Waves wash me sweeter Water roll list'ning Ocean to meet me Drinking clouds glist’ning That would retain the rhyming format, but changes the sentimant somewhat... getting better at that now, fast learning curve here! I do appreciate your time & you perspective. Will sleep on it, 1 30 am now though. Ta Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
professor

professor

17 years 2 months ago

Just a thought Anni

and you probably wont like it but it is really the waves that roll and the water that washes so perhaps the first two lines could be: Water wash me sweeter Waves rolling, list'ning Keith PS, since you asked, the picture is because i have been called "Blue Angel" and there are several of my poems where a Blue Angel is featured "The Phoenix and her Blue Angel" and "Blue Angel"
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Anni is a musician Nina

She sings her words to the clouds and they rain onto the page as naturally as water from the heavens, "upon the earth beneath it is twice blessed." I think she must be able to dance too, as graceful movement and music go together, she certainly dances in her heart and we are pulled from our wallflower patches and waltzed with across the Australian skies with the sounds of words that snatch at things wondrous and poetic and give us both food and wine for thought. Anni the spinner of silver threaded musings, that's you. Ann
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Dearest lovely word weaving woman, thank you so much

Oh my lord Ann you are the most incredible delight, truly I am flattered & blushing, such beautiful words you offer for me & you do get my soul... & always so gorgeously & generously written... You are one I would choose if I could choose my sisters. I feel so so so lucky to have discovered you & be so admired as you paint here, You KNOW I feel these very things right back toward your gorgeous self, we are kindred... you could so easily be describing yourself. What a great thing then if you see that in me you must acknowledge it in yourself... & me the same so we grow & are able better to love ourselves... as it should be!!! xxx So late now! Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Anni, the heart is perhaps

Anni, the heart is perhaps the most suprising of all the organs in it's capacity to heal. :) I loved this, gorgeous poem, as ever feeling much at home in your wonderful wateryness and would echo what Ann says above if i was able or it was necessary! much love b xx (Read Your Territory, it's a thank you to you, (among others). Anni, you make my soul grow :) )
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks for your generous warmth & joy & sharing

Dear Beki gem, I feel the same for you & you are also among my chosen sisterhood... we are a gorgeous bunch all of us, lucky us for having such great company... I am as I've said running late, I will come back tonight & look so much forward to reading your (new?) poem. Thanks for your generous warmth & joy & sharing you really are a glowing faery Beki aren't you sprinkiling your lovely dust about. xx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Welcome territory, open skies & open hearts xxx

Oh Beki, I just had a read of that Beautiful "Territory write, you have me weeping, so lovely... A lovely, lovely write. Thank you, so glad we connected, you lovely shiny one. Oooh you just made me feel like I could step into the would without the fear of hurt (which suddenly got to me again yeaterday) thanks so much for reminding me, just by being such a generous lovely soul... best way to be - always, I think. Much love & admiration xx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Bouyed by companionship and encouragement! x

Anni, I am so glad you enjoyed 'Your Territory' and it seems you read it on the day you needed to! I do hope you are feeling better my friend, that fear gets me too, normally when i'm least expecting it and at times when i thought I was doing quite well! You and your wonderful responses to me and my work have me weeping, what a watery, weepy pair we are! :) I'm so grateful for our connection too, you may be on the other side of the world but I feel we walk together, and energetically we travel side by side. Keep bravely stepping into the world, bouyed by the companionship and encouragement you find here, for the world needs souls such as yours Anni, they make it a better place! much love b xx
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

i can see the white clouds

i can see the white clouds sucking up the ocean in the distance. the water shining like upside down silvery rain. the slow beat of a heart skipping, surprised at the emotion that it felt. you write of love, and the wonder of it so well. i'm surprised that no one has taken you away to that paradise that you have shown us. awesome write my friend! seeing you soar.... keep on keeping on . gee
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

I love posting just so I get to read all your gorgeous responses

Oh Gee that is such a beautiful thing to say, you are so sweet to me, all of you, I feel spoilt as hell. Beautiful bit of descriptive writing yourself there. You paint a whole other deeper dimension with that lovely addition, I love this interaction. How great it is to be immersed in the sharing of lovely wordy folks who are all so generous & I am even more lucky to have befriended some who are far from self involved & give it all out so generously.. I feel like I am gush queen, but you gotta be grateful, well I do anyway. & I really am. As for the love stuff, be really nice huh, I'm really well loved in my community but no men around here who have integrity that aren't already beautifully committed (writing gorgeous poems about their wives & or clearly acknowledging their committment, sigh!), maybe the only ones left are predators, hope not. Can't deny it I guess (my writing's a bit transparent, though I try to cover it) I have met someone really nice, important to take it slowly I think, it Is hard to trust again (heh, how dramatic does that sound!), but somehow I can't help it. Baby steps, maybe it'll be like your 3rd wife charm. I have a pretty fantastic life anyway, & I get to fly either way - see you in that paradise huh. x Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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orgami

17 years 2 months ago

Delightful Delightful Delicious

This poem is awesome and like looking up at nightfall slowly comes the light the brilliant pinprick of conciousness seeping through the last of day till the choir of a thousand rings in joyous wavelengths This new poem you have created is outstanding Anni Im sitting here rocked not since reading my Atwood have I felt this Love how it changes like lighting like octaves thank you!!
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks for acknowledging me for doing the thing I love so much

Jeez O, I am running out of ways to gush here... You know I can't say things I don't feel are true, & I do just feel so in awe & almost overwhelmed. Since I came here I have felt a steady rise in the joy & the "brother/sisterhood" (daggy word I know, but you know, I've used kindred too much!! I am running out of expletives!), I seem to have attracted a regular group of so generous, extremely talented poets that enjoy my work as much as I enjoy theirs. I can only say thank you for adopting me & you know you guys are planting yourselves firmly in my heart, my head & inspiring me no end... I've never felt quite so at home. I can express so much & in some ways be known at a deeper level than most people might, because as you know, not many folks can really get this stuff... YOU always have my friend & I am so grateful & so humbled because you are such a great writer yourself. & oh how I love these things you write O' as beautiful in verse as in comment & so rich I can't eve begin to do it justice those words like you know me make me want to weep with the joy of being known by all of these yes the changes you see "like lighting like octaves" it's true & you have heard me sing I love the octave thing you know so well the places my heart meanders I don't know how you know those things but I bless you for it. "and like looking up at nightfall slowly comes the light the brilliant pinprick of conciousness seeping through the last of day till the choir of a thousand rings in joyous wavelengths" this is just so beautiful O' truly I am so moved & honoured these beautiful things you write .. well... they're just beautiful I can't think of a more precious gift Thank you for seeing me, knowing me & acknowledging me for doing the thing I love so much, the thing I never really thought I'd get to share with any one, & here we all are! Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Gee Geezer, Beautiful Orgami, Lovely Beki

You see what you inspired Anni mi:- " can see the white clouds sucking up the ocean in the distance. the water shining like upside down silvery rain. the slow beat of a heart skipping," "slowly comes the light the brilliant pinprick of conciousness seeping through the last of day till the choir of a thousand rings in joyous wavelengths" "gorgeous poem, as ever feeling much at home in your wonderful wateryness" "another awesome piece." Nina says too, and how you spray your Australian waves up into the sky for us to see after the journey through the days and nights of their poetic flight. Big sigh Ann
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Ahh Ann, lovely creative whimsy you are, a dervish I am sure

Oh yes! exactly Ann, exactly... big sigh. & big emotions, for me this is all big still Ann, this coming home to these good people, these good sentiments. & still I find myself confronted by some of my ghosts the things that felt so cruel before smacked me in the face & sent me flying today, totally unexpectedly, thought I was beyond it, just that it wasn't in my face recently... Awful, awful to find I am able to be so deeply hurt by carelessness & possibly even latent vindictive action, I was reeling from it, & then bit by bit all of this wholesome care & acknowledgement was swirling so soothingly around me... You & the others seemed to close ranks & blot out that stingy behaviour that so sliced into me, the shock of it gradually replaced by such kindness & goodness, I could never express my gratitude enough really, so if I seem extra gushy, that's why... However, as you so expertly point out, I do feel exceptionally spoilt recently here on NEO.. 3 of my poems in a row in the spotlight (so I have written a cheeky, silly thing to break the cycle a bit, I am a believer this space should be shared around, & am not terribly needy of that kind of attention, though realised I should be graceous & grateful of the opinions of my peers here)... Ahh Ann, lovely creative whimsy you are, a dervish I am sure, an ageless nymph of Bacchus harem, graceful in the forest & so a part of nature & it's willful ways. I want to thank you as I always want to... you bring so much inspiration & joy dear one. xxx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

late as always

late as always, i send you congrats from the far side of the world. seems a shame that you feel you have to write something flip, just to give the rest of us a chance for the spotlight. no one deserves it unless they earn it. we just have to exert ourselves to surpass your inner beauty. the beauty that you show us through most lovely writings. you will have that paradise, i'm sure, for that special someone will recognize that you are a true 'cloudthing'! and i read somewhere long ago, that homo-sapiens, means he who looks up! i think i remember it like that anyway. i know that you wouldn't date inter-species, so he will look up and see that wonderful cloudthing in the sky and be struck by the infinte beauty of yourself! keep on keeping on. gee
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Spotlight, can make you squirm a little, but I am grateful

Thanks Gee, so generous & encouraging as ever... & ta for pep talk, not usually one in need of those in truth, but makes a big diff just now, spent much of yesterday reeling from a particularly painful kick in the guts from the last time I thought I was headed to paradise (first time I let that happen to that extent for maybe 20 years)... I wonder how I could have been so wrong, just thought we could be good & caring friends, seems I was foolish again, hate that it hurts, & wish I could just hate him & be done with it, but I can't. In any case you are right & all of this is a better place, & possible new beginnings can feel scary if you let them, if you carry the history into it, it just taints it, I have to choose not to, consciously. Love that looking up thing, in hindsight I see the differences, the focus of who I give my heart. Comparison can be so beautifully liberating, to stand with someone who is truly capable of caring about another, or even you & these others here who offer such beautiful warm support, who kindly take the time to check in... we do that with each other to acknowledge the value we perceive... THAT'S what should be rewarded with love, & love is not finite you can give so much out & always have more, stinginess is such a very sad state... akin to never looking up huh. Sad, miserly, meanness deserves my compassion, but should not hurt me. Especially with so much love & generosity all around me... Stops ME from looking up then I guess... so thanks for reminding me, your timing is fantastic, not late at all. Perfect. As for flip just to give the rest of you a chance, I might have been careless in my comment, I didn't mean to suggest I should dumb myself down so others had a chance, probably just said that cos I'm feeling a bit self conscious & have a sense of "hogging the limelight"... I have such a strong need to share & facilitate, I don't mind leading things, but I like to share the light with others & then sneak away)... Spotlight is a funny thing, I know what you say, but I'm afraid I disagree, I am grateful for my peers support & feel honoured, truly, but it an be a fickle thing. Still, many times yo are right I think, I love being exposed to new works I may not have discovered otherwise when I am busy... But you guys can EASILLY compete with me, not that it's about that as we all know, I think sometimes it's a timing thing among other things. Anyway thanks again Gee, appreciate you input as always. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

never

never meant to make you sound egotistical, i know you aren't. have habit of putting foot in mouth so often lately, that i now have size nine mouth. that is a used comment, but feel it especially true this time. feel bad that someone has given your heart a hard knock. where is he? i'll........! i'm sure that we all feel the same way. so glad that we can help you feel better. of course it's timing, and it is your time now!let the limelight shine on 'cloudthings'! a little something to salve the bruise on your heart. you are special to all of us. it is no chore to look in on you, and see how you are doing. keep on shining for all of us. keep on keeping on. gee
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Courage & tolerance, it's all good.

Dear Gee, funny how we always feel it's "us" to blame, (well some of us), I felt it was ME who was being clumsy. Anyway, you don't have to worry about puting feet in anything with me. I think as long as you do what you do with integrity & good intention you don't need to feel bad. It takes an awful lot to offend me once I trust someone anyway, I love tolerance. & thank you for offering to champion me, I think I managed to heal the discomfort I referred to (I had to step into my courage bigtime) - phew! Sorry for blahhing it really, I wish I hadn't. I do want to say thanks again for your warmth & support though. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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Wafi

17 years 2 months ago

Anni

A nice write with beautiful imagery and sweet rhymes. Congrats on Spotlight. Enjoyed it. Sincerely, Wafi
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Ta Wafi, was just thinking

Ta Wafi, was just thinking bout you yesterday... I always seem to be stealing time on here, making myself late for work so I can respond (I have to work this morning... sigh Saturday!). But I must come & see what you're up to lately have you new work? Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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Wafi

17 years 2 months ago

Yeah

Yeah Anni I have some new work, take a look when you get some free time. Thanks Sincerely, Wafi
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NEW ERA

17 years 2 months ago

SPOTLIGHT

I am a lover of water, grew up by the beach it's the place that I feel the most humble and alive on the planet. Your use of expression is so thoughout, sometimes I feel I have the words and they won't come out or on the paper. It's very inspiring to read your poetry. I have to say Thank You. Your truly Cathy aka New Era
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Welcome to the siren singing, selky swimming, mermaid musers

Hi Cathy, there are a few of us here, watery creatures, Faerybeki who now has the spotlight (& very well deserved) feels the same, as do others here... Maybe it's common to writers, part of our expressive element? In any case, welcome to the siren singing, selky swimming, mermaid musers. Humble & alive, a beautiful combination Cathhy, & the water does seem to bring you there more clearly I agree, lovely.. Thanks for reading my bits & for your comments Cathy, I feel so lucky to be honoured like that, but you know, think about what you wrote, I think you'd find most of us hardly feel worthy of such honour, we each do our creative, often driven little dance when we write, & in this wonderful place we courageously expose our souls. Mostly here you will find good supportive folk who encourage & want nothing but to assist the journey to even better skill as writers (maybe you are not new here & I am telling you what you already know... I best go read your work in any case, if you are a watery soul I will be bound to find a connection I am sure). I suspect your work will be most worthy & that it is like with all of us, hard to acknowledge our own greatness, but I'd be the first to see it in others as you would, that's what's good about this place. Thank you & see you on one of your pages. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 2 months ago

Anni

How beautiful this is. It fills me with a sense of wonder, of otherness; magic, if you will, which is what I look for in poetry. Maybe its just me, but I found this poem to be somewhat erotic at the end. A surrender, if you will. It probably is just me and my maleness! But the imagery is powerful, and very evocative. It is deceptively simple, deceptively because its simplicity stirs levels of emotion and meaning very deeply for me. This is the sign of good poetry, to me, an easy simplicity of words that brings forth such a depth of meaning in the reader. Spotlight well deserved. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

I am honoured, & you are very perceptive

Wow Jim, I think that's some praise coming from you & you know how much I admire your work! I am so happy that it has made you feel like this, I know how I was feeling when I wrote it, all amazed that I could actually feel any sense of possibility, that I would actually be able to trust someone again left me a little astounded, but pleasantly because I'd always rather choose life than blocking life out, or turning my back on it & it's so precious gifts. So yes you are very perceptive... the tiniest buds of wondering how close I'd let someone get to me stirred a lovely wholesome sensuality (not base sexuality as such), a really sweet, fresh wonder at the distant possibility of intimacy again, I felt swept up in such a dreamy mist of loveliness (ahh dear, such a hopeless romantic!)... actually almost a wide eyed incredulity that I would allow it after my last experience... As Stella & I agree, thank goodness for resilliance... I bless mine. & thank you so much... Congrats also on your piece, brilliant & just as much in the spotlight as it should be. I love your work. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 2 months ago

Anni

Wow, I stay away for a while and I come back and you are wowing everyone with your poems, there is hardly room for my comment, but I knew you would be long ago. loved this one, you have a wispy, fairy-like imagination...... Patty
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Anni...

I feel poetically enriched with completing this beauty you've penned... there were a few lines that sent chills down my back from the involvement directed by you to the reader... my favorite.. I hear your nobility - so sweet your humility I'll meet you there - You and I know life fuels the care - I feel where you go Slow, slowed and slower... very effective! great ending... truly a joy to read this write... thanks Richard

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