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Tie-Dye Butterflies

Would you talk about it if you could?
Could you stay a little longer; linger
Like a sweet tie-dye butterfly on the flowers?
If my heart crumbled to fragments and threads
In the elegant starry sky...
I crashed in the darkness, stayed too long
Breathtakenly waiting for a dreamless moon
To show but he stayed a dream.
Might it be time to fly away
Into the midnight skies, little butterfly; tie-dye.
Kaleidescope colors blinking, fluttering wings
Could I fall apart in your hands?
Cuold you hold me a little longer
If my heart crumbled?

Would your words tumble and stutter?
Could you say what you really feel?
If one's heart could finally understand
It's time to move on, little tie-dye butterfly
You can't stay here any longer
Where the moon is only a crescent of you.
We're like two shadows flickering around
In the tall summer grass come midnight
Whispering soft secrets. Hush; tie-dye butterfly
Gentle on the breeze, steady now love
In the arched purple skies.
I flew lost in the great nowhere too long
On bleak weakened wings...
Could you catch me when I fall?
Could you hold me a little longer
If the heart were to finally understand?

Woul you be my every reason to be?
Could you be the full moon dominant in the melting sky?
If you were to shine down on the fragments of
My broken heart, ravaged like trampled flowers
I'd be the tie-dye butterfly
Wrapping her velvet wings around you
Dancing around the kaleidescope skies
Spinning all merging colors and tripped out nights.
We'd be two whispering butterflies; tie-dye in the
Shadows rustling the giant wildflowers in the dark
Won't you dance around them with me?
We're like lovestruck insect gypsies, melting weird
Psychedelic colors in the purple skies
Two tie-dye butterflies
Could you come out and fly with me tonight?
 Could you just listen to your heart
If you were to shine down on me tonight?

— Morgana Tragic Proprietress, Apr 01, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere Past Nevermore, CAN

Favorite Poets: Mostly my delightful, wonderful, crazy friends here at Neopoet. :)

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Nathaniel Radcliffe

17 years 2 months ago

I really like...

Your use of language, lines such as "could you stay a little longer; linger" really appeal to me, and I like the rhyming title. However, although punctuation doesn't seem to be in fashion here, I think it would really help the flow of this poem. Sometimes I don't know whether the next line is meant to carry on from the last one, or is the start of a new sentence, and this can be quite confusing. Even if you choose to remove it later, it might be a good experiment to try placing punctuation everywhere it would go in a normal sentence, just to clarify the meaning to yourself. Nathaniel Radcliffe.
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks

I appreciate your eye on my punctuation- that seems to be my weak point at times. I will certainly take your advice. You are right though, although many poems don't need it, some do. Otherwise, I'm glad you liked it...got the inspiration from a friend of mine here. Only this morning did I actually get enough muse to write the poem. I'm getting into that restless "I want spring" state of mind...it's still snowing here. I'm also glad my writer's block seems to be going away. LOL Just thought I'd throw that out there... Thanks for you advice Peace and Love katie
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Katie, first poem I’ve

Katie, first poem I've read of yours and I loved it, beautiful, some really memorable lines, 'lovestruck insect gypsies'- sounds like an awesome band! :) I always used punctuation but was told it was unnecessary, so who knows? can definitely help reader though. I noticed couple of typos eg. cuold in stanza 1 but insignificant detail! Really fab poem Katie, love that it is inspired by someone here on Neopoet, it's such an inspiring place of creativity! My poem 'Your Territory' is Neopoet inspired, I have found great poetry and people here. :) much love b xx Ps. Glad your writer's block is going, totally feel that one, had it myself recently too! lol x Pps. note to self..locate thesaurus and look up other words for inspire! Lol :)
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Beki

Appreciate you reading! I'll have to get to reading yours as well! Hmmmm maybe we should start a band...LOL. Thanks for noting the typos...will have to get on paul's case about getting spellcheck on here for the crazies like me who don't always check LOL Yes, Misty has inspired a few of my poems. She also inspired my poem Saddened Moon in one of our late night talks about the new moon/full moon. Something she said just clicked. Funny, inspiration, is it not? Peace and Love Katie PS Yes a thesaurus does help!
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d.p.g

17 years 2 months ago

I know Im a new boot and Im

I know Im a new boot and Im definitely not a english teacher,however your fellow friends must realize that its the words that express the deep abyss in your mind your poem is very deep form express in writing.
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks, d.p.g. I don’t

Thanks, d.p.g. I don't always pay attention to punctuation as I feel the same as you, that the words come first. They are entitled to opinion however and I appreciate such feedback. It only makes us better poets, as no one is perfect. Hope you're enjoying Neopoet so far! Peace and Love Katie
Blue_Halcyon

Blue_Halcyon

17 years 2 months ago

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY

I chased away the writer's block. ***Pokes the writer's block with her sword*** Awesome poem Katie - the imagery your words create in this one is very vivid. I'm with Nathaniel on the punctuation - needs some commas here and there to help figure out the flow in some areas - other than that it's great! Another piece to be envious of. ;-)
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

LOL thanks Misty, and thanks

LOL thanks Misty, and thanks for poking the writer's block, it needed that! LOL Yeah, I see what everyone means about puncuation, guess I got so excited just o write something I forgot to properly edit it...LOL I'll remember that for next time... As always, Misty..you rock! Peace and Love katie
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

tie-dye butterflies

love your title as everyone else does. i'm as guilty of puncuation descrepencies, as anyone here, and so expect i will get my share from the infamous 'nathaniel', and of course already been recipient from 'ann of norway'. i have short-term memory loss tho and will most likely repeat these mistakes o'er and o'er again until they become part of long-term memory. heh, heh. at any rate, loved this piece! especially the line:"kaleidescope colors, fluttering wings" i planted flowers yesterday in my garden, hoping that i will attract brightly colored butterflies, as i did last year. also hoping for hummingbirds! have friend on next block that has them early in the morn. am looking forward to more in this vein. you brought me visions! thank you. beauty is a matter of perspective. gee
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Geezer!

Well, perhaps if we get some "poetic mechanics" in here insread of "poetic mystics" we might get some punctuation in these poems! LOL I'm glad you enjoyed this one, and as always, thank you for reading! I like seeing the same names coming back to read, it makes me all tie-dye like the butterflies!!!! (wow I'm weird...) So now I'm in a spring mood, the sun is out today and I'll be looking for them butterflies, though they don't normally show till May. Glad it brought you visions, it brought me happiness that my writer's block went away..yayyyyyy Peace and love Katie
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

p.s.

spell-check great idea!
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Ha!

I'll bug paul about it....LOL
SR

Sydney Rae

17 years 2 months ago

IT’s gorgeous!!!! Another

IT's gorgeous!!!! Another great poem from katie!!! Team Friendship!!!!
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Ty Syd!

Team Friendship! We'll save the world someday girl! Love the new pic by the way! Glad you enjoyed this one, Syd. Peace and love Happiness Team friendship Katie
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Anc!

Glad you like this one, much as I loved yours! It's great to see you getting out and reading stuff, it's the greatest joy of Neo, is connecting and sharing! Keep reading and keep writing, you're off to a great start here! Peace and Love Katie
GI

Giuliana Isabella

17 years 2 months ago

Wow

This poem has left me speechless, Katie. It is rich and detailed like a painting or tapestry - each line is alive with energy and imagery. Truely wonderful. Like Nathaniel said in another comment, I love the way you create a rythem with lines like "Into the midnight skies, little butterfly; tie-dye". My first time on Neo, and already I've found a firm favourite - wow! -Giuliana Isabella
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Awww thanks G!

I have a butterfly fettish...as summer approaches it really comes out in my poems lol. Thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm flattered that it's one of your faves....I see you're enjoying Neo! That's wonderful. Hope to chat at ya again soon! Peace N Love Katie Go Live & Get Rewarded

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