Idle

My mind formed a fist gave reality a twist love this part As the title states though it sounds like the musings of an idle mind. Come on I know you can do better. I've seen it, I gave you the star rating I did because of that one line, love the imagery in it. Chrys

at least your looking for the positive or at least an answer.... perhaps finding none has left you further speechless?? lol sp* 3rd stanza dismised (dismissed?) a quite nicely put poem, Jess ~Tonya

Silence works wonders... it begets all things... Love. ~A "The way you make love is the way God will be with you." Rumi

Good to see you here and posting... I could relate to this write only too well, I think at times that there is nothing coming from me worthwhile to anyone, nothing to share, no sights to see, dismissing my own thoughts because even I'm not interested... oh yes, I can feel where you were during this little write... I believe "word" should be plural in your last stanza... Richard

Sometimes I think 90% of our words are meaningless, but I think you expressed this well. Respectfully, Rett: I'm more dangerous than terrorists. I and the soldiers coming home believe in freedom. HS For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

your poem is good in the sense that it put me to think deep on the contents you projected. shan

this is short and to the point, on how sometimes our minds stall and we have to jump started, so as to refresh. enjoyed the picture you have painted here! thanks, Eddie Life is like a railroad track that leads to many junctures, if you stand on the track Love comes speeding along and runs you over!! Splat!!!!

or is it I put it elsewhere or neverhit the submit or post great poem Jess love it

Really good poetry. It has that special flavor of discerning life difficulty and attempting to break free from it clutches. I am there a lot, but can't possibly put it to words as eloquently as you have. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Not really, my mind formed a fist gave reality a twist (it developed an alarming list) and sank. enjoyed this, thanks. Craig

In all, I like this piece. I praise the effort you put in to produce it, especially, coming after feeling dry. I like the rhyme scheme, the second stanza and the last line. Well done. T.

filter hasn't been letting me in to your profile. Just now it did. Glad to see you're still alive. And kicking at whatever. A mild suggestion, if I might, as to: While idly speculating why I gave a little sigh the chances to descry are slim My mind formed a fist gave reality a twist (it developed an alarming list) and sank I sit here quite complacent a cold beer is adjacent an idea forming nascent dismissed it These words have little meaning perhaps I am just screening the possibility demeaning I have nothing more to say ... the whole thing flows quite well, but then kind of ka-chunks at the last line, violates the flow earlier established. I think the final line too long. Suggestion: These words have little meaning perhaps I am just screening the possibility demeaning [and now I stop] ... or something like that. All yours, Chuck

I love the flow of this one. it was a treat to read out loud, which I did on the second take (not many poems make me do this, you know.) at least you are getting good stuff out of your block :-) Kata

the change of tense in the third stanza threw me a wee bit...i kept automatically reading the first line as 'i sat there quite complacent' ...not sure...just a thought. other than that, i really enjoyed this little write. the second stanza is my favourite, especially the last 2 lines of it... love the listing mind... i like how the last line ends this abruptly too...it really fits cheers p