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Open door to the darkside.

Through the open door I walk, looking for my accolades.
I never once have an inkling, that my feet are made of clay.
Clay that crumbles as I stride into the arena.

There are no cries of hallelujah,and I stand in the dust of once proud steps.
I look around and see no smiling faces,only feeling the cool breath of acknowledgment.
"Yes,you are here." Our honors are reserved for a new hero."
"You are the past." Can you stand on the crumbs of what was?"

Bolstered by a few faint cries of encouragement, I make ready for the battle of my life.
If I am victorious,I may regain my former glory. I will accept the cheers of the crowd!
The audience blows cold to temper my sword of hot air.
Their lukewarm breath fans my cheek. "Show us some new moves!"
"Or are you all out?"

"Do you expect us to crown you with the laurels of victory,without having our entertainment?"
"We will have blood,sweat and tears!" You will perform,we care not which part you accept."
"Be it victor or victim. You will play our game,or suffer the death of indifference."

I choose another course,I will climb a different pedestal. I begin my ascent.
I follow a different path now. I will destroy them and their petty games.
I now have new feet of brass,and will stomp on the altars where I once worshipped!
My heart of compassion is stronger than the old one filled with Pride.
It will deflect the blows of slashing tongues and barbs of sarcasam.

My hands will not clench into fists,they will grasp the arrows of hurt.
They will break the bows from which they have come.
I tire of conflict,it wears away your stones.Thick skin wears too!
Let me rid myself of the weight of you!

I am tempted,sorely tempted, to give you one last big show,to pull down the pillars.
Crash the colosseum on your heads like 'Samson' .
No... as an old duelist,who grows weary of the constant challenges,
I will put down my sword and back away,returning to the world of sanity.
Through the door I entered.

My feet change once again,this time to wood.
I will find a lush place amid the dunes of desert.
There I will put down roots,and make it my private oasis.
You will not enter through my door,it is locked and the key lost.
No matter.......... I will not leave here again!



— Geezer, Apr 24, 2009

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

amazing

thank you thank you worked real hard on this. gee
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

No,No, Julie you have it wrong.......

It wasn't about you, it was for you! It was about my trials and determination not to return to the darkside of me. I once was one of those people, those that picked fights and drank to excess,just looking for a fight. I do not wish to return to those days! They were truly days of darkness. I only meant to thank you for letting me see that I was on the brink. I wish only to be free of those people and demons. I meant that I would put down that sword,and try to find everlasting peace on that score. I ....aaahhhhhh... I don't know what to say to you. I am afraid I will only offend you again! Maybe I'm the one with a thick skin.....and head! Sorry! Gee.
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

p.s.

Thanks for the honor? Acrostic eh? who are you calling an Acrostic? LOL. Looking at it in a different light,I now see why you would think it was about you. Sorry! That was not my intent at all. Boy! I really have to find a pair of shoes that won't fit in my mouth. Seems like I will be forever apologising to you. How will I ever get any work done? Gee
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Gee...

This is one bit of well written work, and I am glad to be here and able to read. Well done! Well done! Richard
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

open door

thank you richard,it means a lot,coming from you. i really value your opinion. i don't think i replied to your comments and felt it not respectful to do so. i worked hard on this and felt i told the story well. it being sort of auto-biographical in a sense,really helped. thank you, gee
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

Geezer

I think I’d call it a ballad. And a really, really nice one at that. A lot of people are fickle, as long as they are not being made to feel like they are doing anything wrong, or that you or one is a mirror or their own self of action, they will accept you. But, rise above that, to another plane and many will turn on you. I liked the clay and wooden shoe symbols. One, is easily cracked, easy to slip from (easy to remove and jump into the fray) The other, pliable, root-able. Stable. I agree, thick skin wears too, things get old, there’s only so much one can take. Loved the idea of an oasis, your own paradise, at peace. Great analogy between the peaceful and the warrior. Enjoyed the write very much. Always Sincere, Tonya
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

open door

as i said to richard,'the moonman' i didn't know if i had replied to your comments and if i haven't, wish to do so now. you are another of the people that i hold a high opinion of. expressing my self in this manner is new to me and i am glad that you have grasped firmly,the sense of this work. i worked hard on it. thank you very much for your kind comments. i am most appreciative, gee.
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 1 month ago

Gee

Enjoyed the read. I wonder if it would read a bit smoother if you wrote "I now have new feet of brass, and I will stomp upon the altars", rather than I have gotten new feet of brass, and I will stomp all over the altars. just a suggestion. Sincerely, Linda
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

open door

thank you much for your comments, have taken under advisement, your suggestions were helpful. glad you enjoyed! gee
B

bjp

17 years ago

Geezer

This poem has one of those universal messages which poets envy another having found: in this case, the variations in our faces to the world: actor, hero, combatant, visionary, saint, solitary. Men especially have these roles fostered into their notions of self, often to the cause of great grief. I like much of the language of this poem. For example: "Through the open door I walk, looking for my accolades. I never once have an inkling, that my feet are made of clay." And, "...my sword of hot air...lukewarm breath fans my cheek". The later part of this last quote is a play on words while being otherwise a nice alignment of words. But the poem also has a Wagnerian bigness which, while clearly intended, leaves you with a Wagnerian bigness; a kind of over-the-top operatic voice which causes playfulness to reduce the seriousness of the subject. One wonders why this topic can't be more serious. Internally, it almost always is. Perhaps because it is so serious a topic that it risks too much to deal with it in the absence of humour. Regards, bjp

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