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Ba Ba Black Sheep

BA BA BLACK SHEEP

The black
The sheep
Ba Ba
A metaphor
Souls cry
When consciousness
Is weak

Souls loved
Some lay in dust
Soul that are condemned
Are black sheep
When called

This sheep ?

Calling BA BA
A metaphor
For saying
Why can’t I be loved
 Am I flesh and skin
 I am still a sheep
Can one word make me
Condemned

If this sheep is condemned
It will be all it can be
And one day
This sheep
Will live without
No more black
Not more Ba
Ba
But only just a sheep

But the other sheep
Never had to face
A truth
A reality
They carrier
A secret
A question
Am I to
A black sheep
Can I find my place 

This  black sheep is glad
When one sheep asked
Do you feel blessed
With the blackness
Condemning your past

Why do you ask
This sheep of black
Are you now condemned
Did you think color
Would give you
A free pass




— press, Jun 17, 2009

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press

press

16 years 11 months ago

Ba Ba RE

hey friend very nice to meet you ? Fleur are you ready to [smile] this is my name Pressley Oliver Grant Hambrick III wow did U say my dad is Jr. and my son is the forth my grandson is the filth I am very glad you enjoy my writing I am trying to push my boundaries pass the every day simple rhyming . I call it fast food poetry ? it's taste good but it's not filling the mind love to you fleur Press
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

Wow!!!!

What a fantastic name, I'm jealous, how is it to be that you are a granddaddy with a young photo like that? I'm totally gobsmacked!!!! :)fleur
press

press

16 years 11 months ago

Ba Ba RE

Hey Jayne .who is that girl in that picture wow ? [smile] she looks about eighteen [R U laughing JC] I am very glad you enjoy my writing I am trying to push my boundaries pass the every day simple rhyming . I call it fast food poetry ? it's taste good but it's not filling the mind love to Press
Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Now your being Cheeky lol

I wish I was eighteen again Press (smile) ... of all your poetry? this is one of your best that I have read , its only my opinion , but you have gone somewhere different when you wrote this one , wherever you went ? you should visit often .... this isnt fast food poetry .... this breathes poetry in every word and to call it anything else would be profane ... (smile) I loved this one ... Jayne x x
Rett

Rett

16 years 11 months ago

Well son, now that you have heard from others

I will tell you officially that I really think this is a fabulous poem. I love how you did it. The uses of metaphor in this is terrific. Very well done! Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

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