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INNER TURBULENCE

The dredging  of demons around the  heartunearthing issues of which we want no part  -
showing sensitive spots 
                 which escape exposure
offering palliative measures
                which allow no closure. It's the inner turbulence that interests me insights that shine their lighton dark corners we to need to see. The intrapsychic tension always presents there,it makes things happen of which we're unaware.The drives, the forces
that work from deep within both repulsions and attractions -their dull momentum begin. If only we could work above the linemake consciousness happen -
Live  in real timenot be driven by demons, dark sides and such -but bridle body and mind from that
which hurts too much...
 BjR  June 23 '09
— Bonitaj, Jun 23, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Boni...

and a good lesson it is... I felt the meter you were going for wasn't quite there... almost, but not quite... the drudgery of demons around the heart the pounding of feet(,) (their) imprints to impart If only we could work above the line make consciousness happen and (be) in real time. only a couple of suggestions Boni... the () are either added punctuation or suggestions as to where you might remove a word for a tighter meter and flow of words... but... merely suggestions on this piece, content was very good... thank you for posting... Richard
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 11 months ago

INNER TURBULENCE

Ah Richard! You've reigned me in again with your genius! Thank you - that took some re-doing but see what you think now! Boni
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 11 months ago

INNER TURBULENCE

WOE RICHARD! With your looks and my intelligence... or is that in reverse! It has changed the meaning considerably - but I agree I like it a lot more too! Thanks again for those bloody spurs! Bonitaj

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