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daybreak

I believe in God
because I live
with each and
every sunrise,
for I have seen
the darkness cover
the night,
I have heard the
song of silence
and watched
the green grass grow,

I have
plucked the fruit
from the giving tree,

found shelter in Your embrace.




— Kailashana, Jun 26, 2009

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

I don't believe in god

I don't believe in God because I live and die with each and every sunrise, because I have seen the darkness cover the light, I have heard the song of silence... only silence and watched the green grass grow, and whither under defoliants I have plucked the fruit from the giving tree, and been charged by Santos. found no shelter in Your embrace. Ever. Cheers, Jess
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Jess there is nothing but

Jess there is nothing but God (all-that=is-all-that-is-not) masquerading as all the beauty and the tears. To know this is to be free of suffering in the midst of suffering. in One embrace, we *are*, ~A "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

You and your *challenges*,

You and your *challenges*, unlike others I've had, are delightful, my dear puppet-man. ~A "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

The gods .......

The gods are crazy!... Would you allow your children to make their own decisions? Gee.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Well-asked, Gee.

Well-asked, Gee. Well-asked. Splendidly well-asked. ~A "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin
Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

I am drunk and enter the

I am drunk and enter the fray ... LOL ... ok love you guys but heres my thought the gods gave children free will so that they may learn themselves from there own mistakes ... I am blessed to have four children and often sit and chat to them about their thoughts were they are going what they plan and they always have a say at the end of it it is there life all we can do is guide them and send them out in hopes that they have learnt something from you ..... ok i know shut up you drunken wench .. Love you guys ... Anna this is beautiful hun .... this spoke to my drunken soul and near made me cry ... Love you Jayne x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Perhaps its finally time to

Perhaps its finally time to put to rest the God-as-Father myth. We've been hurting ourselves and one another since time immemorial. Free will and independence indeed. Jayne, most parents rarely listen to their children. Perhaps it's time to reassert the God-as-Mother image. Smile. ~A "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin
faerybeki

faerybeki

16 years 11 months ago

Smile too :) in only tiny

Smile too :) in only tiny bit drunk ;) agreement :) much love to all x Ps Anna I love your poem, and the philosophy it's utterly captivating. I'm guessing you will already have come across, and read 'Anastasia' by Vladimir Megre? more love b x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Beki, I’m really not

Hi Beki, I'm really not very well versed in many poets. I have googled V.M. & Anastasia, and find it enthralling. I may just order the books. Thank you for the introductions. ;-) And speaking of a tiny bit drunk: Rumi: The Lover is ever drunk with Love. He is mad, she is free. He sings with delight, she dances with ecstasy. Caught by our own thoughts, we worry about everything. But once we get drunk on that Love whatever will be, will be. "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin
faerybeki

faerybeki

16 years 11 months ago

Anna, it’s my pleasure to

Anna, it's my pleasure to introduce you, of all people to these books, I've only read the first thus far(in a couple of days whilst on holiday), but they are sweeping my little chosen family here in Wiltshire, affirming much, answering more, and changing all of our lives, as indeed they seem to be who ever reads them, but you Anna I believe are there, it's in your poetry, I read you often, being left with this gorgeous still, calm feeling, so blurred am I with what you so often express, I frequently can't comment, I was reminded of you a little when I read Anastasia (oh do get them, if I could I'd 'make' everyone read it) and was drawn to tell you of them. On finishing the book I was compelled to write this short piece, i had no intention of posting but I'd very much like to share with you for some reason, so here goes ;) Anastasia In the beginning was the Word and the Word was God God is Love Love is the Word I, I am Man this book has really helped me bridge the gap between my Christian upbringing and my new age, hippy tendencies, the yoga, the Reiki, it's all the same :) we're all one! I really can't rave on about it enough lol :) and I have indeed rambled a bit, a big share for all my silent comments, written only on this universal heart. Ummm, must read some Rumi, have failed to see anything by Rumi any where on this site that hasn't completely resonated with me, thanks for sharing. Oh, one more thing (if it's ok to pick your brain on an only slightly differnet vein?) if you consciously open yourself to Love, allowing it to flow through you in all directions, finding it everywhere, seeing it in everything, finding it totally over whelms and confuses you, challenging all preconcieved notions of such things as romance, and traditional wrapping of relationships, how do you know if you've found 'love' in the conventional sense? Is it merely another choice we need to be more responsible in making (and by we, I mean me ;)) Oh Anna, forgive me for outpouring these queries of mine at you, I have hurt one who is remarkable indeed, and feel I have lessons to learn, to avoid doing it again in the future, I know not why I share this with you, other than I am drawn to and have allowed it, there is something that leads me to thnik you might understand what it is I am asking. Anyway I am now bit self conscious and think perhaps I should just shush now lol, thanks for listening Anna, much love b xxx
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Sweet Beki, How do I

Dear Sweet Beki, How do I fit 6 decades of learning, of mistakes, of unlearning, of relearning into a few words? I can only say this much for sure: life is love or fear of love, sometimes both simultaneously. And here I'll quote Kahil Gibran on Love; I've never read anything that has touched everything at once as this poem of his does. Kahlil Gibran on Love When love beckons to you, follow him, Though his ways are hard and steep. And when his wings enfold you yield to him, Though the sword hidden among his pinions may wound you. And when he speaks to you believe in him, Though his voice may shatter your dreams as the north wind lays waste the garden. For even as love crowns you so shall he crucify you. Even as he is for your growth so is he for your pruning. Even as he ascends to your height and caresses your tenderest branches that quiver in the sun, So shall he descend to your roots and shake them in their clinging to the earth. Like sheaves of corn he gathers you unto himself. He threshes you to make you naked. He sifts you to free you from your husks. He grinds you to whiteness. He kneads you until you are pliant; And then he assigns you to his sacred fire, that you may become sacred bread for God's sacred feast. All these things shall love do unto you that you may know the secrets of your heart, and in that knowledge become a fragment of Life's heart. But if in your fear you would seek only love's peace and love's pleasure, Then it is better for you that you cover your nakedness and pass out of love's threshing-floor, Into the seasonless world where you shall laugh, but not all of your laughter, and weep, but not all of your tears. Love gives naught but itself and takes naught but from itself. Love possesses not nor would it be possessed; For love is sufficient unto love. When you love you should not say, "God is in my heart," but rather, "I am in the heart of God." And think not you can direct the course of love, for love, if it finds you worthy, directs your course. Love has no other desire but to fulfill itself. But if you love and must needs have desires, let these be your desires: To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To know the pain of too much tenderness. To be wounded by your own understanding of love; And to bleed willingly and joyfully. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving; To rest at the noon hour and meditate love's ecstasy; To return home at eventide with gratitude; And then to sleep with a prayer for the beloved in your heart and a song of praise upon your lips.

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