Geezer

Jul 02, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dancer

You are four and full of energy,

Funny things you do.

Tickling my funny-bone.

I laugh when I'm watching you .

Your sleep is full of barks,

But silence when you wake.

You think in dreams, wolf-like.

And chases that you make.

Hellhound in land of Nod.

Monster, I don't see.

Scaredy-cat, you are....

Steal my heart from me.

I love the way you are,

Chase the rabbits, and no gun.

Eat with me and Grandpa,

Our diets on the run.

Lying on the floor,

Sad eyes see us go.

Staying home again,

It hurts us to say no.

I can't eat all I got,

Doggie-bag for "Dancer" girl.

She jumps, and runs 'round the room.

The best dog, in the world!

— Geezer, Jul 02, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Crazy Dog

I think another title could be better, something about the dog, though. Your language use was good as was the pacing. The theme reminded me of a dog named Chelsea who once owned me. Plenty of love for this dog was written here. Always, Cat

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Hello

Sorry it took me so long to get back here. I like the new title much better than tyhe old! Always, Cat

Bonitaj

16 years 11 months ago

CRAZY DOG

I have to tell you - I don't like dogs - but I loved this poem! Initially I thought you were writing about a little child, (so much for reading the title)but as it unfolded the language made it more obvious... Great write! Loved this line "scaredy-cat you are, steal my heart from me"but changed it a little... "tear" is too negative for such a positive poem. Your call though. Thanks Bonita j

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

LMAO …. this is pure

LMAO .... this is pure genius Gee I loved it ... I love animals so you got me with the puppy .. I am such a sucker for animals but shhhh ... Much Love Jayne x x

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

Genius? Dancer thinks so.

I won't tell! Thank you, we are trying hard! I have loved all my dogs. { so much so, I have been accused of loving them more than wifey.] Thanks from me and Jason. P.S. You could read 'Rugby' Something I wrote for a dog now gone.~ Gee.

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