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MIA CULPA



Mia culpa!

Why is it always my fault? to look up at the stars seeking...    Seeing only the far off  twinkling.              of Chimeras beyond grasp -
 Exasperation has me clasped!                       Mia culpa! to want to understand why    love's lustful longings         should always run dry -
 people grow wings, get up and fly. Why is it my fault too...  to  have to say sorry,          grovel and grasp -               to want more,  than I am given to ask...               Is this mere cowardice or           the better part of valour?              to take on the blame  rather than seem dull & callow?  Is this just Life's lesson        to teach me "to fast"       To live off slivers          and be given 'tests' -                 only saints could pass ?

BjR  25 July 2009

callow: young and inexperienced; immature
chimera:an impossible or foolish fancy  
— Bonitaj, Jul 25, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Baz

16 years 10 months ago

Love it

Love it! Know the story; read the book; seen the film; got the tee shirt; lived it!! Barry
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Hello Barry!

If only one person can feel a resonance from the poems we write - I guess that's good enough. I had great trepidation putting this one out - since I thought: "Why am I being such a martyr?" But ce'la vie! It's just the way it came out! Thank you so much for stopping by! Anyone from Swansea - who's had even that closeness to Dylan Thomas - has my admiration! :) CHeers Bonita j
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bjp

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Bonita,

You must know the answer to your own questions. Lust is the chemical stickiness that forces us into cinnamon bun batter. This gluten will only hold its rise due to our other attributes, but not in isolation; dependent rather, how our attributes warm with the other's. Now blame: there is a sticky subject. Its other half is responsibility. And on its lake the better part of valour has a small cottage. I do think you have turned some wonderful phrases on this lathe of yours. Is this mere cowardice or the better part of valour? to take on the blame rather than seem dull & callow? Is this just Life’s lesson to teach me “to[o] fast” To live off slivers and be given ‘tests’ - only saints could pass ? Isn't slivers just how it feels. And, the answer is yes, time is the proving ground of trust and each heart is sufficiently sacred and fragile that a careful manager will use its long scale to weigh a lifetime's risk. Oddly, I doubt saints could pass the tests. The tests are designed to frustrate, gall, insinuate, etc., to find the sharped ends of personality. Women, not oddly, are the worst in the test game. Their brains have had tens of millenniums worth of babies to over protect to the point of asphyxiation, and it passes with little scrutiny into lover's bounty. It has been a pleasure to read your poem and to find the phrases for adequate comment. Brian
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

I loved your extrapolation

of so many lines! So many additional descriptive wonders you have added to this terrain of coarse morality! So many "YES! I agree" conjectures... especially 'slivers' - a mere morsel, a scrap as it suggests! Liked your word play on 'To(o) fast - perhaps to feast?! :) Delighted that I could've engaged your wit and wisdom! Bonita j

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