Kaleidoscopic Collage

Missiles projectedfrom the human womb;Over crowded worlds;Human detritus Disappeared civilisations;Flora and fauna;either rare or relegated toto the archivesof National Geographic Bloated politicians;Impoverished sycophantsChoking rivers;Boiling oceans;Melting glaciers Territorial aggrandisement;Brutalised populations;Squashed cultures;Obliterated histories Transformed paradises;Killing fields;Underground caches;of human remains Greater and lesser bodiesaligned like sheep for slaughterHuman historypainted in blood;Written in waterTrapped in greed

— leonard daranjo, Aug 04, 2009

Critiques

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Powerful Leonard …. like a

Powerful Leonard .... like a brick to the head but it is very true every single word ... have missed reading you !! good to see you back my friend much love and hugz Jayne x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...

leonard daranjo

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks Jayne

I am honoured. Leonard

docmaverick

16 years 10 months ago

SOooo....

...jaded in your point of view, but after the proverbial "dust finally settles"...it was clear, concise, and an honest read ! You see my vote; I enjoyed this one!!! "Write On"! sincerely, #{:>{)}8==== docmaverick.

leonard daranjo

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks Docmaverick

I am happy you liked it. Leonard

Taniaspoetry

16 years 10 months ago

a moving collage

Leonard Each line draws a clear emotion, image and thought And through each there is a sense of motion, of a question raised A melange of words yet the lines stride confidently The only troublesome one was aggrandisement, which try as I might, stuck a bit Good work here. Cheers Tania

leonard daranjo

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks Tania

for your most discerning comment. Leonard

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