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Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Aug 15, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Subject: Winter (edited)

On a cold December evening
wind chimes hanging on the porch,
sound woefully abandoned
by human caring and consideration.

contest code 083109
100 characters
Subject: Winter


— Candlewitch, Aug 15, 2009

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Cat

Good luck with the contest my friend this is wonderful ... and substitute the December for August and thats the world I live in , its freezing here tonight , cant see any faults with this one Cat its a winner ;) much love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

=0

Thanks, dear friend, I appreciate it. love, Cat
yenti

yenti

16 years 10 months ago

Cat

A very short piece that says such a lot and as Jayne is from the Southern Hemishphere I just had to do this:- On a cold August Evening By human caring and consideration Sound woefully abandoned Wind chimes hanging on the porch, Hope it hasn't taken any of the meaning away from the original LOL Well conceived I spent a few years in the Sothern place of Africa so I know it can be hard sometimes, LOL You all take care out there I love you all, Yours Ian.T
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Ian

No, you didn't take anything away from mine and I liked the way you rewrote it. Thank you very much. Always, Cat
yenti

yenti

16 years 10 months ago

Thank you Young Cat

Can't remember where I put it, but you have joined my Acrostic Dictionary and not being able to find the one I wrote on stream here is a copy of it from my records: Candlewitch Cautiously seeks the truth Aware of failings Needing friendly ways Demands a tidy mind Leaves a glow in others Exacts the true pathway Walks with others Incites random verse Teaches from strength Catches the sunshine Heeds to the cries of all Can I find the one on stream NO but my comp remembers these things I write LOL. You take care little lady,Yours Ian.T
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Ian

I am so completely knocked out by this tribute! Wow! You could have knocked me over with one shallow breath. Thank you so very much. I don't know if I am deserving of your fine words, but I will try to live up to them. Always, Cat
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Hello Cat!

You've come a long way dear! Lot's of luck for your entry... we're all rooting for you! CHeers Boni
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks, Boni

I appreciate the comment and the support. I'll take all I can get, lol. Always, Cat
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

wonderful

I love Winter its my favorite right after Fall, gotta go with Fall because Halloween is my favorite holiday! Beautiful description of Winter, and Im a December baby!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

hello green eyes

Halloween is my favorite holiday, too! I still get all dressed up in costume to give out candy to the trick-or-treaters! I love seeing them in their little costumes, they are so cute. Thanks for the support, green eyes. Always, Cat
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 10 months ago

Hello Cat

Like a Sherlock Holmes story of a winter night, or a chinese painting done with few strokes, your words set the scene very succintly and to the point. I like this poem a lot! Regards, Hugo
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

hello Hugo

What a lovely thing to say. Thank you very much. Always, cat
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

hello Souray

Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I also thank you for the five stars you so generously gave. Always, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Cat

Congrates on spotlight my friend ... Big Smile from down under .. much love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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sweetspirit

16 years 9 months ago

Cat

I think tis great and wonderful description of Winter..good luck to you.. Jen
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Cat

Gosh ur good, and I am sorry for reading your poems backwards. In December, on the porch, I would be in a lather of sweat. You have such a way to bring across the beauty in your life. Just wonderful. Lyz XX
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Lyx

Has it been a long cold winter for you? We are just getting into Fall now and the leaves on the trees are changing colours, yellows, reds and oranges! I imagine Spring is breaking out where you are. Thank you for your kind comments, they are appreciated. Always, Cat
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Cat

For some reason I like this version even more. The flow is excellent. Gentle Regards, Hugo
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Hugo

You always have the nicest things to say in your comments! Thank you. Always, Cat

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