Seren

Aug 25, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Bring it

I stand ready
bring it on,
come on big boy
lets hear your song

Your talk is loud
and full of fluff,
come on Darlin'
pick it up

Running my finger
down your face,
takes you to
another place

Stroking your hair
twirls a strand,
while I hold
and rub your hand

You moan dreamy
going to sleep,
I know you fall
right in so deep

Calm and free
you float the sky,
while I sit writing
closely by

And when I want
that pretty thing,
I twitch the end
of this string

Streaming in
my D.N.A,
Is a part of you
I carry always

— Seren, Aug 25, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

Bring it

It must be in the air.!! All these lovely poems flooding my mind. You are" one of my favorite writers on site, and there are so many, talented people out here, It's unbelievable the joy I get from all that share: their hearts; and talent. Mantiscepter

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Mantis

I know my friend there has been some amazing writing around this week , Thank you for the lovely compliment, I have enjoyed watching you grow and improve and the best thing I have been reading you since day dot lol so I get to WATCH you grow and bloom and you are !! your writing has improved just in the short time you have been here ... And thats the best thing in the world if you ask me ... my comment down below says it all the older we get the more clearly we become ourselves ... and never is that more true in writing , love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

ziggy

16 years 9 months ago

bring it

enda, patrick collins. o i like this it flows so easy lovely sentiment

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Patrick thank you for your

Patrick thank you for your comment , this is me being cheeky to my hubby he joined the site and is going to write a reply to it lol should be interesting ... Regards Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear seren

I think your getting a little cheeky there girl. i enjoyed it and I am still smiling. Talk later, back to the boring life. Lyz.x

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Lyz

*BIG SMILE !!!!!* woot love you Lyz you got it , I was being cheeky with him but he thought it was wonderful hes going to write a reply to this one ... he he he god help me I think hes about to hang me out to dry and tell all my secrets I just told his :O he he he gotta love me being a cheeky wench!! who aint afraid to have a dig :P ... love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

You got.......

You got it comin' wench! LOL. I love it! I think there is nothing better than a little banter between mates. It helps to keep things a little spicy. This was a good natured jibe, and I don't think you have to worry about him giving away too many secrets. Although I expect there are many. You did Good Hun, It flows so well, L & Hugs, Gee

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Gee !! he he

He hasnt started it yet but I think when he does I will start to sweat a little, he is helping our daughter learn Bass guitar at the moment when hes done with that he will probably get on it ... then I start to sweat ... ha ha ha ... oh we have a great relationship Gee always playing with each other even after nearly ten years together the years seem to have gotten easier, LOL Spicy god thats what worries me I wasnt thinking when I threw down the gauntlet cause if you think I speak my mind .... wooooah Nelly hes worse than I am LMAO ... Love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Congrats on getting him to join Neo.

Congrats on getting him to join Neo. I think he may find it a very interesting place. Welcome to Snake. Gee

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Snake said to say thankies

Snake said to say thankies well thank you I say thankies LOL and he cant wait to get into the sote more and get to read some poems we are sharing a computer till tomorrow ... the kids stole the other one LOL ... much love Jayne x x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Quillsvein1

16 years 9 months ago

a very

beautiful and human sentiment expressed here--your love for your child, perhaps? i may be off here. But I love you/with my D.N.A./and I’ll be with you/till my dying day." this earthy yet very ethereal sentiment is indeed heart warming. congrats! GB

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

GB

I just changed the last lines of this ... eckkk !! anyway thanks for the comment its for my partner LOL hes a new poet here at the site and I was just being a little cheeky ... I know I am naughty !! love and hugz Jayne x x ON a somber note I noticed your picture after I commented ... Ted Kennedy wasn't just admired in the states I thought a lot of the Kennedy's .. R.I.P Teddy .. "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Jayne

You have to have known that I would love this playful piece. I think it shares an aspect of your true depth with with the reader. You are fully dimensional and well rounded. I am looking forward to reading the response to this piece. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Cat ,

I actually thought of you when I posted it I thought you havent seen me full flight being a little naughty LOL hey I am human :P I was being a cheeky wench, but he was loved it and roared laughing sooo I am in trouble LOL hes been busy but is going to start his reply tomorrow ... god help me I got no idea what hes going to say .... hes outspoken soooo wooah nelly I might be in trouble LOL funny trouble but trouble none the less (hug) much love and big hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

hugo la rosa

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Seren

Your poem is awesome and beautiful, and you know I love them all. Just now, I respectfully would like to make a suggestion, since you want the raw truth. On the last stanza, the last verse sort of comes off line, and kind of does not obey your masterful keystrokes. Have you tried: Streaming in my D.N.A is a part of you I always have. For me the rest is perfect. Honestly and friendly, Hugo

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Hugo,

Thank you so much for your wonderufully kind comment , thank you for your words of encouragment I have days where I am not sure of things , that last stanza has been changed about 7 times already,I despair of finding a perfect end for this one I will endeavor to think about it while I visit one of the other poets from the site(BossCombat) this weekend maybe a change of scenery will help in the thought process ??? LOL thank you as always for your support it is very much appreciated my friend .. love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

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