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Hide Your Face (Offensive Language/Violence)

 You know what I would like to do ? If I could put a faceto you ? ----- Of all the thingsI hate in this world,its fucking thievesthe scourge', of the earth Someone trustedrevered and loved,stole something preciousmemory glances above When I find this slimy fuck?I know I'll want to stick his guts Ill show him the painspearing my side,I'll let him livewithout any pride With a knee to his headand a upper cut to mouth,I'll fuck up his dayswith all that lies south Agony will fireas he grabs balls ,with a kick to the heada palm heel falls I shall wait till you crawl from out the dirt,moaning and cryingburning with hurt Waiting for youto catch your breath,I'll think up torturesnot pondered yet I'll stitch your handsto hide your face,as I start againmy steps retrace I will beat you tillyour flowing red,then puffy and wonderingyou'll wish you were dead And when I walkaway from youI wont turn backas you moan and spew ----- That bloom you stolehad been growing inside, Its now wilted in deathfrom filth of your crime!







I feel the need to explain this write , someone stole my wallet Wednesday , it wasn't the wallet that hurts its the memories it held cannot be replaced , the last photo i ever took of my mum and other small memories ... I am to say the least, pissed off , I couldn't hurt a flea but if i could ?......
— Seren, Aug 27, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Jayne

I am so sorry. Do you have any idea of who the culprit is? The photos... cherished memories... I cannot imagine anyone stealing from you, you are so sweet. They probably took it for the money, and knowing you, you probably would have given it to them, with your heart as big as the sky. *HUGS* The write is brilliant and really stirs my blood. Makes me mad as Hell! Always, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Cat

The worst bit of this is , I was meant to go to Newcastle yesterday and because they stole my wallet couldn't go because i was meant to be on a bus at 6.30am I couldnt get money out without a card till 9am ... and yes I have an idea , and if we find out it is him , it will break our hearts , but without proof its mute we cannot know for sure ... and I am fair if nothing else , time will out them I always say .. and I hope karma bites their ass ... its the photo and some pressed four leaf clovers my ex husbands mother gave me that I am devo'd about more than anything they were more special than you could believe ... bastards ... Love and big hugz Jayne x x x As they say though Cat ? blessings flow ... I forgot to mention .IN the wallet was my daughters trip money for a school excursion it was quite expensive , when the school heard about what happened they paid it for us ... so I just thought i would share that with you ... it made me cry that they thought so much of our daughter, to pay it for us .. "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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bjp

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe,

This is almost as scary as Geezer's latest. And yet I think it is better written than mulled over and basking upon the brain. Olya says it is the worst thing to have a strong suspicion because so often it is wrong but in the meantime it effects so much. It is a useful to show the world our own villain. (By the way, villain and village have the same root since a villain was a villager/farmer and consider vile, smelly, untrustworthy and ignorant by the French nobility.) Once out of the closet, so to speak, we can exhale in calm. At least if our friends still say hello. Hello, Jayne-Chloe. I am sorry to hear about the delay in your travel plans. I am giving you five stars for scaring the shit out of all concerned, and readers too. There are some typographical matters which I can comment on should you wish. Brian
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bjp

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe,

This is almost as scary as Geezer's latest. And yet I think it is better written than mulled over and basking upon the brain. Olya says it is the worst thing to have a strong suspicion because so often it is wrong but in the meantime it effects so much. It is a useful to show the world our own villain. (By the way, villain and village have the same root since a villain was a villager/farmer and consider vile, smelly, untrustworthy and ignorant by the French nobility.) Once out of the closet, so to speak, we can exhale in calm. At least if our friends still say hello. Hello, Jayne-Chloe. I am sorry to hear about the delay in your travel plans. I am giving you five stars for scaring the shit out of all concerned, and readers too. There are some typographical matters which I can comment on should you wish. Brian
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Brian and Olya ...

First off , I finally made it to newcastle I am at BossCombat's so for the next couple of days I am going to forget this event and hopefully someone up above will take pity on me and my memories will find their way back to me , thanks for the comment on this poem I honestly didnt expect this reaction its blown my mind LOL ... And I WOULD love you to comment on the typographical matters in my poem , cause right now I am so tired I am not sure what you meen LOL ... but I am smiling and I feel a little better today but still hurt, time heals , Olya is right its the suspicion is the worst of it, I have put him out of my mind to be honest I said to someone else last night I am fair , so till I know for sure it is just a stolen wallet, I refuse to let one thief change how I view my world ... I refuse to become the paranoid woman muttering to herself that everyone is stealing her stuff .. and it wouldnt because you see the night my wallet went missing there was only one other person at our house ... narrows the field down a tad lol ... BUT I cannot condemn someone in my mind, it makes me as ugly as the thief ... I hate to think what people think of me after this right but its hard not to hear some of these terms in my house my partner is a martial artist and 2 of my boys are boxers lol ... I am light as a feather if I took a swing at someone id end up in Oz looking for toto and asking for Aunt May ... LOL anyway I am going to enjoy my weekend with matty and robb ... and then hospital on monday and tuesday ... Love to you both Jayne x x x P.S I pissed myself laughing at the scaring the shit out of you all comment Snake said to tell you I am a big fucking pussy LOL ... "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
press

press

16 years 9 months ago

JC

I said what the hell [smile]? were did this come from . But I see they stole your wallet. So do you want to handle your business , Detroit style ? as I was a drug lord enforcer . We never get our hands dirty , we use a baseball bat & we don't spill blood that's get's to messy plus their blood on you can cause problems it's hard to hide blood ,your shoes will leave prints in the blood on the ground , we break bones knee caps , arms , ribs . Less DNA transferred. OK I am so crazy JC just messaging around. I don't do those things anymore. I hope you feel better now . And I must say the rhyming in this poem is very good. The pen is mightier than the sword. And I hope Jess will be back YOUR DOG [THAT'S WHAT WE CALL FRIENDS IN DET] PRESS
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Press

Of all the compliments you have given me this one has shocked me :O LOL I am really a pussy cat except where my babies are concerned , then I am a lioness lol ... The Pen is mighter than the sword and in this case its the only weapon I have to weld ... LOL I have so many people here that are pissed off about it Press that if they do come forward after they hand the wallet back they should run , where i come from? its the country, but we live by certain standards most of us anyway ... its this ... help Ya mates , keep ya hands in ya pockets and fingers too , and if you break any of our country traditions usually the boys get rowdy lol and you know what that means , I think its because people see how hard things have been for us , thats what made people so outraged , thanks for you comment huni... Your friend love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Very Concise...

No wasted words there! You meant everyone of them, and I know that feeling. One good thing is that they probably won't come around any more. My wife's oldest boy hasn't been around for over a week. Usually, he is here everyday, trying to get in to sleep or eat, or something. Bugging my neighbors, and just being a nusience. It will probably be at least another month before he can look me in the eye and say he didn't do it. I know the loss of those precious little mementos, and the pic. of Mom hurt as much as to think of who did it. I don't want you pissed at me, and I don't think anyone else would either. You almost did him too fast, ya know. "Waiting for you to catch your breath, I'll think up tortures not pondered yet." SUPERB ! L & Hugz, Gee.
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Gee ,

I know that you were waiting for this one since i sorta gave you the heads up,I am so glad you liked this one after reading all your horror poems I thought it would be a different write for me LOL . thieves are the bane of our world , and the reason that now , here in the country what would have been a unlocked door is now barred locked and guarded by dogs ... I know it wasnt anyone in my house that took my wallet my kids have grown up knowing that if you want something you ask for it and then we barter, chores or other LOL to get the said same thing ... and what pissed me off even more if they had of asked me for money I would have given it to them I am generous with friends and everyone knows that , thats why I was so hurt when it went missing ... take care huni much love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 9 months ago

Those stupid thieves,

Something that has been said to me a few times Jayne, "Don't piss off a poet" That was a great read, your anger and hurt came through loud and clear. Sorry this is my first read of yours on my return, because it makes you so sad, but a real bang to come back to. Just so happens I like a bang sometimes. Loved it. D.D.
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

OMFG OMFG OMFG OMFG OMFG OMFG OMFG OMFG OMFG

BIGGEST SMILESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS :D .... You know what after the worst FUCKING week I can remember in a long time .... You just gave me the biggest smile ... I HAVE MISSED YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH lol .... welcome back darlin ... eh fuck the theif your back ... makes it all better ... when you posting ??? huh huh huh ??? lmao sorry I know I am like a rabbit on red bulls ... but I am smiling :D:D love you huni check your mail ;) and again in the morning, while the boys go out for a bit later I will write you love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 9 months ago

Jayne...

goodness girl, you really went off! I too hate a thief, my youngest son had sticky fingers for a while... I told him that I wasn't going to help him get out of any tight situations where he had stolen something. I think many go through times where they have the urge to steal, and I am glad to say that he finally stopped having those urges. I see you think you know who it is, that makes it very hard to face the one you think may've done the deed without saying something. It sounds like it occurred at home... which is even worse. I do hope the guilty party comes to you and brings your pictures back at least. Richard
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Richard,

.... I have a little temper , BUT as my dad says I am a slow train coming but when i get pushed a little bit too far ?, I SNAP , and this was my snappo lol ,what made me so very angry ? was know that this person was someone that was a friend, the night it went missing was in a two hour time frame it was sitting on my kitchen bench and then it wasnt, and there was only one other person in the house lol ... bit had not to make assumptions but I have cleared my mind of it and sit with am open mind till something shows me otherwise .. anyway I better go and visit with BossCombat he says G'day LOl and so does Snake , snake will get on the compuer tomorrow while we visit and answer everyones comments hes sitting back having a Jim Beam with Boss hes been working all week lol take care Love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 9 months ago

Jayne...

tell the boyz G'day for me, it is eight in the morning here and I am raising my second cup of coffee to them now. Richard
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Richard

I have to say its nice to be down visiting with the boys, but it precedes a hospital visit so its sucky for me no drinking, well one or twooo wouldnt hurt buttt not tonight I am buggared lol , but the boys said to say Cheers they will have a bourbon for you ... love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Seren

Totally understandable, poor bugger. The suspicion of someone you know, is a hard thing to bare. Sorry to hear this, it is something you don't need at this moment. And yes it is true, what goes around comes around, Karma. A comment on your colorful poem. Colorful, nice choice of words, and what, no elf? Smiling? Hope all goes well for you and I know you and Snake will get to the bottom of it. A shame about your personal things,I would be F.....g, livid too. Luv Lyz.x
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Lyz

I was shattered and I was angry, But like i said above I am trying to let go of the anger its a useless emotion if you cant let it go, its good to vent , fuck dont i know it but seriously ? I was more upset over a fifty yr old picture than I was bout the money which was a large sum I was going away the next day , oh I am in Newy already LOL hey Neighbour :P , staying at BossCombats ... who I am about to answer .. hes sitting across from me its so bizarre Lyz LOL ... anyway have a great weekend and take care much love Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall"
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Bosscombat

16 years 9 months ago

:)

Best poem I love it when u get a bit'o'fight in ya Should do it more often Makes for good poetry If we find the dog he'll get his ♣
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

LOL thats what worries me if

LOL thats what worries me if you guys get to them before me I cannot swat a fly at the moment ...and ther wont be anything left ... its ok huni they will get theirs Karma and all that,anyway I gotta finish writing comments so I can come hang with you and Snake LOL love and hugz Jayne x x x x You know how weird this is replying to something while your in the room Tre' Bizarre pmsl ... "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 9 months ago

I have read all your posts...

...and it seems this is the 'one'...the real you came out...isn't it great when you can use something as beautiful as poetry to express the stored up emotions inside. Great piece, not that I wish you to ever go through this again, you are a mean writer when your filled with anger...go girl!! regards, HS
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

You Have read ALL my posts :O

WOW hun were you bored ? just joking , there is over a hundred on here i was informed ... LOL the real me came out? ... well we all have different aspects to ourselves I am not a violent person but if I had the strength to beat the thief ... yup I would hvae no problem doing so ... Hooded stranger I am guessing you are new , I am away this weekend and just logged in ,so Welcome to the site its great to have you here I look forward to reading you , I am so glad you liked this one , I have been asked to get violent in poems more often for the male members of my household they apparently think my mind kung foo is strong he he he thank you for you comment ... Regards Jayne x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 9 months ago

Yes it took me a while to...

...read through your back catalogue, but I thoroughly enjoyed myself. Yes, I guess you can call me new...thanks for the welcome. I was attacked by a man with a knife a few months back, he slashed my face and hands, leaving some minor scars...however, despite the pain and blood...I actually was able to grab him by the neck and well...he got what was coming to him. I didn't kill him!!...but he didn't get up until the police arrived...I have written two poems about this episode...I may post one of them at some point. Keep that mind kung foo going! Kindest regards, HS
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear HS

Well I think you might be the only person on the face of the planet (that I know of LOL) that has read all my poems ,Thats an amazing feat , But still an honour that your trudged though my early mistakes and style is changing all the time as I learn I am always trying out new things ... I am so sorry to hear you where attacked I am away from home at the moment having treatment for leukemia so I know pain we live hand in hand at the moment ... I am glad you stood up for yourself, protect and survive these days I am afraid ... I am glad the police got him ... Will keep the mind Kung Foo going but I find it hard to write violence without having a belly full of fire to go with it ... I will have to pay someone to piss me off LMAO :P just joking ... Love Jayne x x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...
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sweetspirit

16 years 9 months ago

(((laughing)))

(((laughing))) uncontrollably on the floor...girl!!! I am so sorry that your precious items were taken but to put it too words like this is awesome. I love fiesty;) Good luck on your trip to the hospital hope all turns out well for you. and honestly do hope you get your belongings returned and never fear hun Karma always comes for whats hers.. Jen
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Jen

:P lol nothing wrong with feisty means we got spirit lol and I am glad it makes ya laugh i was still angry when I wrote it but I am ok I read this earlier and it made me cringe and then I laughed I thought eh nothing wrong with a bit of backbone lol ... thanks for your comment its much appreciated love and hugz Jayne x x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

Hard

It's a shame you had to lose precious items, Hope they may find their way back. Strong words fearless attitude, I know your still you. Good write. Mantiscepter
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Mantis

I read this now and I cringe a little BUT ~!!! its art and expression but its not the way I normally am BUT I was soooo angry ... and everyone seems to like my feisty side lol ... Glad you know I am still meee LOL much love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
TD

Taylor Delaware

16 years 9 months ago

In a word...

Sheesh!! I liked it! My wallet was stolen a couple years back, and the douche had the nerve to mail back my wallet, minus the credit cards...And I have to disagree with Press, I wouldn't have minded some blood on the old shoes, lol. Again, powerful stuff, Jayne!! xo
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Taylor

*Big Smile* glad you enjoyed my little dummy spit lol ...Cannot believe the spastic mailed your wallet back sans the credit cards what a prick LOL like the wallet was what you were missing LOL ... I gotta tell you I am still angry a little but ? karma will bite their ass :) Much Respect Love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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aeron

16 years 7 months ago

Go GRRL!

Wallet or heart, let it all out. Anger is a hugely positive emotion. Screw the new-agers, anger causes positive change. I am glad you are my guide, I really like you and your poetry, even some of the ones that rhyme :) Aeron
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Aeron

Thats so true but ... Anger can also be distructive ... I learnt over time when I get angry walk away? if the problem follows you ... then sort it out ... I dont react in anger normally but this asshole stole my wallet from my house without a thought to how they were going to affect our lives ... and it did in more ways than I could have imagined ...thanks for the read LOL and yes I know not many people like rhyming poetry but I love the romantics, what can I say they were the leaders who blazed the path of poetic change,to ignore it ? would be to forget where we came from ... love and hugs Jayne x x
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aeron

16 years 7 months ago

you are wise

yes there is constructive and destructive anger. I may learn a little here (some of the poetry is so fucking aweful I want to smash the screen), others humbles and touches me deeply, while others still rouse my righteous, healty anger. Aeron
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Aeron

I AM soooooooo glad you didnt read my early stuff ... it was horrid ... but i've worked and listened and watched and learnt ... and then as I felt like I had gotten confident at one level ... I move the bar up four slots lol ... you have to I am still far from writing acceptable poetry in my eyes ... you take care and Ill see what everyones been up to later ... its dinnertime and I made the natives beef strog for dinner lol ... love and hugs Jayne x x

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