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The Other Side.

                                 Darkness falls....
                               cold hands touch......
         and I feel the breath of nothing upon my skin.
                   The light of my existence flickers
  while the dulled teeth of fate gnaws away at my soul,
           sealing my end with its saddened laugh.
                          The light loses its flame
               but I cannot move my wearied bones.
              The light pauses with a false hope......
                       shining on.....then off again......
                  my eyes know only the blackness.....
             nonexistent tears flow down to nowhere,
        as my defeated spirit moves toward the gates.
— JWwildcat2012, Aug 28, 2009

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Region, Country: Brownsville,KY USA

Favorite Poets: D. H Lawrence and Robert Frost

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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear James

Well I must say, bloody awesome. I do like it. Deep, intense but a bit sad. We all have to go sometime, I suppose. Great flow, cant wait to check out the rest of your work. Great write. Lyz.
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

P.S

Title was fine, when you read the above, yes I liked it, from beginning to end.

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