SWIFT SEDUCTION

The seconds were precious

All precautions had lapsed

The moment they kissed

She felt her legs collapse .

“Hold on now honey – we’ve got forever

To last.”

Only disavowal to pretend...

she knew her innocence

had past.

“Don’t predict our Fate

it's all just a farse!

And with that she succumbed...

The Trouble her mother once warned of
had now begun!

BjR 4 September '09

— Bonitaj, Sep 04, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Boni

This one is a winner in my book. I cannot choose favorite lines because they are all equally as good. I have this feeling that you will revise and update this poem in your quest for perfection, so I will watch for changes. Always, Cat

Bonitaj

16 years 9 months ago

Ah Cat!

What's this... another attempt to keep me up all night :) lol But seriously - you know me well! Have just done some tweeking and now I'm off to bed! Cheers Boni

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Boni

I read this early this morning and I was tired so I am sorry i am late getting to you I had to sleep apparently LOL I am like Cat I cannot pick favourite lines but they are all wonderful , its again one of your best , much love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

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