theladyblue

Sep 25, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Neolution

The winds of change
Sing their haunted songs
And we like mad men
Scrabble to make sense
Where no sense is present

We long to understand
Yet we will happily let it
Slip away when we are unaware
Ignorance is bliss after all
When bliss is lacking that is

‘Cobble your own path!
Keep your feet out of my mortar
And we shall be friends.
Yet critic my efforts please
After all I am here to improve.’

This craft, our craft
Its dead to a majority
Yet this minority
So easily forgets, it is founded
On love, of word, of men

— theladyblue, Sep 25, 2009

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Critiques

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Emarie

The winds of change are always blowing, we just have to soar along with it and hope for the best ... poignant piece I loved the rhythm and title is wonderful copywrite that shit, great write !! Kind regards love Jayne x

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

seren...

thank you for your kind comment...i wonder if the message will ever truly be recieved... Emarie -------------- "i read you and see...that between the pen, paper and you...there is little room for me..." ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

hello

I think your title is quite clever and I found the theme to be completely refreshing. My favorite lines are: ‘Cobble your own path! Keep your feet out of my mortar And we shall be friends. Yet critic my efforts please After all I am here to improve.’ This craft, our craft Its dead to a majority Yet this minority So easily forgets, it is founded On love, of word, of men I think you have touched on the heart of neopoet Always, Cat

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

cat...

i am glad to know that my intentions found their way honestly...love is the only bridge that hope can flow under... Emarie ------------ "i read you and see...that between the pen, paper and you...there is little room for me..." ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear LadyBlue:

I love this poem, it is well written, the verbs and nouns are playing a melody of their own, although sad, but it sings of better things to come! Thank you! Sincerely, Hugo

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

thank you!

your comment is well recieved! <3 Emarie ___________________________________________________________________________________ "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

infinite_dwarf

16 years 8 months ago

Emarie

"You say you want a Neolution, welll, you knowww.." - oops wrong song! Anyways, I have to agree with Cat - that stanza begging for a good crit really solidified this write. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "There was no promise made, the part you played, the chance you took. There's no way out of here, when you come in you're in for good." - David Gilmour

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

we all just wanna change the world...

love that song :) Thanks so much for the comment hun!!! <3 Emarie ___________________________________________________________________________________ "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Ink Dragon

16 years 8 months ago

Emarie,

guess what? Neopoet loves you back, girl! Kidding aside, your poem asks for critique and reminds us all that we are here to improve. It should be spotlighted! If it doesn't make spotlight, I'd like to include it in the next Newsletter issue. Let me know if that's ok with you, please. Yours, ~Nina

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

nina...

I would be honored by either dear...thank you so much! <3 Emarie ___________________________________________________________________________________ "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Congrates on evolution

Congrates on evolution Emarie ... this poem was wonderful the first time round and I enjoyed it even more this time great work hun love Jayne x x x

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

a few days late...

but thank you very much Seren! <3 Emarie ___________________________________________________________________________________ "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

orgami

16 years 8 months ago

calm Sunday Reading Sexton in Twiggs and now home

"Meet you on the other side" a folk slow song was playing it was quiet the large windows the copper brushed chairs with design fabric a medium Columbian with dark sugar and cream and Sextons letters so calm the rain falling on the walk home the buildings darkening the leaves colourful and thick around the storm grates the construction throwing rough soil amongst the bright yellow safety colours of equipment orange fencing must go this poem is the icing on the cake Thank You Emarie

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

i long for that rain...

some rain has found me but i havent had the pleasure of walking around much and so i am confined to this miserable apartment. Time with my children is priceless though and so if i complain it is only half hearted...thank you O~ <3 Emarie __________________________________________________________________________________ "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

paparazii

16 years 8 months ago

Good one

The flow of your words brings us the neopoet close defining what we are and why we're here and how this friendly minority can carry on. Thank you Paparazii

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

Its funny, the way it comes...

such a rush and i hastily scramble to get it down before it leaves me...Neopoet is unique and alive...Neolution is inevitable Thank you so much Paparazii...I love your photo...those are some telling shadows disguised by some beautiful rays of sun... <3 Emarie ___________________________________________________________________________________ "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Quillsvein1

16 years 8 months ago

important poem

Marie. There needs to be more of this kind of thing on Neopoet--since Jess left there has, I say with a humble rock in my throat, a certain lack of honesty. Perhaps you will step up to provide that. "Keep your feet out of my mortar!" Awesome. You rock. GB

theladyblue

16 years 8 months ago

my friend...

i think you have the bull by the horns...:D thanks for reading! <3 Emarie __________________________________________________________________________________ "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

themoonman

16 years 8 months ago

Emarie...

I have read this poem a few times, and I like it more each time. at first I wanted to change "scrabble" to "scramble"... but silly me... scrabble so aptly fits, playing the word game on Neopoet. I just wanted you to know how much I liked the poem as it is a true testament of why we are here! Richard

jabuu

16 years 8 months ago

sincerity

Well written poem.I am beginning to feel i am in a pool of sharks.Neopeot is a wonerful place to be.I love the first stanza The winds of change Sing their haunted songs And we like mad men Scrabble to make sense Where no sense is present

sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

16 years 7 months ago

Poetry

Good morning. Standing in your mix of a twix. Understand that I give no reason for this. And believe that I know the answer. So what the heck Just dirrect the answer. The written word be it ubserd or just pick the reason to learn. Excuse my foot print left to the morter. Excuse my mind Lost in the smather. Yet remember the truth the reason of youth and the poetry well spoken. Steven A. Kacer

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

Scrabble to make sense Where no sense is present

Oh so true ad so well put, we find it hard to help when your ideas and expressions entertain our ears and eyes with thought awakening patterns. We mad men are unable to fulfil your command as we so enjoy the words that you employ oh lady in blue who waltzes here through our ranks like a wind of change, while we scrabble (skravel- scratching with a pen in N.) along singing our songs to you, what shall we do? Yours with love Ann of Norway

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