ziggy

Sep 25, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

SEEKING

Dare i seek perfection
If i do, where and what direction

I yearn to borrow shadows from greatness
desire holding the weight of the challenge
leaping from here to the wings
of this soaring sequel
being true to self .

Clinging to the tail of the beast
that stops me from being its equal

Using frequent failure as sails
to gust me in its direction
motivation being at the heart
of it all .

Having grappled with ones own imperfections
the fire within pulling self in overlapping fraught
directions

I suddenly pause

Fall to knees and grin

For what i seek lies deep within .

— ziggy, Sep 25, 2009

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Critiques

themoonman

16 years 8 months ago

Ziggy...

Great pen shown here... really enjoyed the read. that stops me from been its equal... (being)?? I am sure that was a typo. fraught... an old word that you do not see much in today's writings... to be filled with, or freight, or cargo... I had to look it up, thanks! great ending! Richard

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

seeking

enda, patrick collins. hey thanks very much i was a bit concerned about this one its not my usual write , ya a typo indeed bit i am always glad to have them pointed out i sometimes come up with a line in my head that i have to look up my self i dont know where half of it comes from , i posted this a half hour after writing it not always a good idea am glad of your comments chat soon ,,,,,,,,,,, ziggy

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

A struggle within settled in

A struggle within settled in word and with hope ... nice I loved it :) great work ... Kind regards love Jayne x x x

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Hello

That inner struggle is a real kicker, isn't it. At one time or another every thinking, sensitive person seeks perfection. How well you express it. Thanks for the read. I swear you just keep getting better and better. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

seeking

enda, patrick collins. hi cat , i am so delighted that you like it this is about my desire to change my style of writing a little i don`t think i could of wrote this prior to joining neopoet so many thanks for all the feed back from yourself and everyone else its been great for me ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,yours truly ziggyyyyyyy

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Ziggy, Ziggy, Ziggy

Well done, I know I should write comment on the way and content this poem has been aspired but I just want to tell u I love it and I hope to see this change of pace grow with ur confidence in change. I love it. Well done. Love Lyz. XX Woo. X

doorman

16 years 8 months ago

Hey, Nice perspectives in

Hey, Nice perspectives in this write, you've got good style here, zig. Liked the sense and rhythm of it. This line stood out for me, 'Having grappled with ones own imperfections the fire within pulling self in overlapping fraught directions' Regards, Espen.

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

seeking

enda, patrick collins. hi there espen i am glad you got to read this you picke dout its best line my friend cheers for that zigggy

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

seeking

enda, patrick collins. hi there espen i am glad you got to read this you picked out its best line my friend cheers for that zigggy

Hooded Stranger

16 years 8 months ago

Superb

An inner turmoil, perfectly written and I like poems that don't follow a rigid structure where verses are of different lengths. I really like this line: "Using frequent failure as sails to gust me in its direction" - very powerful. This isn't your usual style of poem, however it shows you can step outside your box and throw a few jagged stones back in the box and create a smooth surface. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

ziggy

16 years 8 months ago

seeking

enda, patrick collins. hi again this one is a more recent write since joing neo all these wonderfull poems are changing my stle a bit i have many many more but i now want to rework them before posting any thing else , glad you like it this a quest the theme that is cheers ................zig

Cloudthings

16 years 8 months ago

I think you have a great mind that needs more freedom to find it

Hi Ziggy, have been meaning to get around to a visit to you for some time, so hard to keep up here with little time online, I miss it. I was most intrigued by this one, I have to admit I prefer your work unrhymed (remember it is just a personal opinion, please feel free to ignore happily) there is a lot more freedom & I think you have a great mind that needs more freedom to find its best. I see it here, in the unrhymed sections, they are unfettered & wonderful, it gives me a taste for more, I hope you have more. Cheers Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama

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