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Oct 07, 2009
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Hitchhiker (warning graphic)
Hitchhiker
You were asking for it
in your boots and tight jeans.
I pulled up, reaching over,
opening the door for you.
Smiling, I inquired
where you were headed,
knowing full well
you would never make
your destination.
You were completely
at ease, a predator
unaware of being stalked.
I had watched you
for weeks on end,
observing the children
on the playground.
You never saw me
stealthily watching you.
Suddenly, last week,
opportunity came calling.
You stepped off the curb,
striking a pose
sticking out your thumb.
I was ready and prepared
with a stranger's smile
and a can of soda containing
a date rape drug, Rohypnol.
Greedily, you drank of it
ever so willingly.
When you passed out,
I drove you to my
cabin in the woods,
where I secured you
to a table in the cellar.
Patiently I awaited your return
to the conscious world.
Jubiliant, to see
the shock in your eyes
like a small animal
caught in a snare;
the moment was delicious.
Over the next few days,
I surgically peeled
thin strips of your skin
from your naked body,
and extracted the nails
from their pink beds,
listening to the music
of your pleading screams,
and your confession
for love of little boys,
promising to give them up
if only I would let you go.
Regrettably, you died too soon.
I guess your faint heart
betrayed you by giving out.
I almost cried in frustration,
for next on my agenda
was amputation.
From one predator
to another, you were
an abysmal disappointment.
You were asking for it
in your boots and tight jeans.
I pulled up, reaching over,
opening the door for you.
Smiling, I inquired
where you were headed,
knowing full well
you would never make
your destination.
You were completely
at ease, a predator
unaware of being stalked.
I had watched you
for weeks on end,
observing the children
on the playground.
You never saw me
stealthily watching you.
Suddenly, last week,
opportunity came calling.
You stepped off the curb,
striking a pose
sticking out your thumb.
I was ready and prepared
with a stranger's smile
and a can of soda containing
a date rape drug, Rohypnol.
Greedily, you drank of it
ever so willingly.
When you passed out,
I drove you to my
cabin in the woods,
where I secured you
to a table in the cellar.
Patiently I awaited your return
to the conscious world.
Jubiliant, to see
the shock in your eyes
like a small animal
caught in a snare;
the moment was delicious.
Over the next few days,
I surgically peeled
thin strips of your skin
from your naked body,
and extracted the nails
from their pink beds,
listening to the music
of your pleading screams,
and your confession
for love of little boys,
promising to give them up
if only I would let you go.
Regrettably, you died too soon.
I guess your faint heart
betrayed you by giving out.
I almost cried in frustration,
for next on my agenda
was amputation.
From one predator
to another, you were
an abysmal disappointment.
— Candlewitch, Oct 07, 2009
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The Silent Saint
16 years 8 months ago
...
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
hitchhiking...
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
?
themoonman
16 years 8 months ago
Cat...
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Richard
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Richard
Hooded Stranger
16 years 8 months ago
Oh! Queen of the twist
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Dan
Seren
16 years 8 months ago
Dearest Cat
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Dearest Jayne
hugo la rosa
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Cat:
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Hugo
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Hey Kelsey!
lyz
16 years 8 months ago
brilliant
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Lyz
Seren
16 years 8 months ago
Dearest Cat ...
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Jay Knee 2 Bums
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
hello Kaligantsaros
Worldwide Freeride
16 years 8 months ago
oooooooooooooookkkkkkkkkkkaaaaaayyy Psycho alert!
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
hello Dale
Wafi
16 years 8 months ago
Lucky He Died Soon, Cat
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
hello Wafi
Bonitaj
16 years 8 months ago
In English
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
=0)
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Keep comming back to this
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
Hi Seabhac
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16 years 8 months ago
wow!
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=0)
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dear kat
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16 years 8 months ago
Dear Snake
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16 years 7 months ago
wow
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16 years 7 months ago
Hello Annie-Rae
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