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no escape

1. 

a slowpoke cowboy
rests
against October sunset

2.

in an alternate sunset
she was a pole dancer
he had oily hands
reaching across the stage
behind preying eyes

dreams in a cocoon

3.

I can't go somewhere I've never been
if you don't show me the way
to Paradise at your side.

I can't even begin to tell you my story
if you don't listen with the silence
from which neither of us can hide

I can't see with your eyes
if you don't love with all your heart

You needn't build a bridge if
there is no river between us.

Just this quiet drowning.
Just this tender light.
Just this blue sky.

4.

poems
held
together
by
a
silk
thread





— Kailashana, Oct 12, 2009

Critiques

seabhac

seabhac

16 years 8 months ago

Perfect title

I so love the way you paint the back drop to stage your words upon. You take the reader in and focus them on the core of the poem, the heart of it. This is beautiful and tragic in its portrayal. The lines that stay with me are I can’t see with your eyes if you don’t love with all your heart Silken thread is stronger than its delicate looks, the moth that searches for the light.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 8 months ago

Thank you Lyz. I think we

Thank you Lyz. I think we would be close friends...alas you also live in the UK. Isn't Neopoet amazing, so many kindred spirits, sharing life's heart & soul? ~A p.s. I originally wrote if you don't love *me* with all your heart, what you think?
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 8 months ago

Yes I feel we share much already in lifes journey

Anything is possible...to quote’ why build a bridge if there isn't a river' Guess we just need a very long bridge to cross the ocean and trails of Neopoets will traverse the planet. I like the way you have made it. If you had put the ‘me’ in it would have personalised it too much and taken away the real message that to truly love with ones heart is unconditional. The ‘me’ is read as a given. Liz
L

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Kailashana

They should get together, the cowboy and the pole dancer. This is like a long distant romance. I want more of this tale, and I like the way you have presented it. Wonderful. Love Lyz. XX
B

bjp

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Anna,

quiet drowning each drip stapled firm a tacky mist misaligned upon some cheek ratchet the drizzle into revels of distress
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 8 months ago

Oh Brian of the

Oh Brian of the spit-polished poetry, of the cleaving, misting heart, the immeasurable soul, your understand my distress. ~A
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Anna

Sorry I ahve missed a couple of your poems I am really sick at the moment just leaving my mark and heading back to bed ... wanted a dose of Anna ;) and its all been said before me (huggles) have missed ya hun love and higgest bug hugs Jayne x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 8 months ago

Your right eye (as well as

Your right eye (as well as your left ;-) will be profoundly missed here while you recouperate, dear lovely heart, dear gentle spirit. Take good care of yourself, remember you can call me night or day. I'm here for you, always. Hugs of healing love for my Aussie daughter. ~A

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