THE ROAD WELL TRAVELLED

There is a solitary road
that leads from encodium to calumny,
sign posted by time
overgrown by twists of fate.

You're back now
from so long ago,
shrunken, lifeless -
no more "I told you" so's

You're lined now,
more so than before,
my yearning fails me -
what's left to adore?

There's a stolid saddness
peering through.
Hearts have been harrowed -
failed attempts at loving you.

The path once travelled
extols exhaustion with no rest -
Its' destiny of securing love
a mere meandering to distress.

BjR October 25, '09

— Bonitaj, Oct 25, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Bonita,

"encodium to calumny"! The first three stanzas are more than a delight! Stanza four catches on the word "wimp", like a stop sign before a turn. Let the art meander yet not still. A successive insult needs keep company with "is there nothing to adore". Those are your high words. Then leap the cliché, "The scales have fallen," to the trail, as if from a lost wedding, of conclusion. The weight of the wording is greedily good. Inclined to give five for what is here but that would seem a slight.. Then the title... catch them by the throat with anything at all because the poem has to be read. Brian

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Catch their throat so the

Catch their throat so the poem be read ... never more truer words than those dear Boni ... you have traveled well ... it was a heavy sadness I felt in this write ... and I agree with Brian on the Wimp it looses its strength ... there is so many good lines in this one I dare not try and pick ... brilliant write hun I will be back in the edits ... love and hugs Jayne x x

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

I too have come back

to edit and rephrase. Thank you both for your magnificent spurs - I have dropped the cliches! Touche! Hope it reads a little stronger! Brian! Good to have you stop by on your many arduous journeys! Yours too, is a road well travelled! ;) Thanks Boni

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Taaa daaaa lol and theres

Taaa daaaa lol and theres your stars huni ... lol sorry tired today ...Love and hugs Jayne x x

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

despite the odds

you made the effort to come back again!! Thank you so much! coming from one with your calibre of work that means one helluva (as the Aussies would say!) lot! lol Cheers Boni

bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Bonita,

Wow! What a finish! "Its’ destiny of securing love/ a mere meandering to distress." I just love what you have done here! Congradulations. Brian

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

WELL BRIAN!

I do believe this is a first! the 5 star rating from you that is! Thank you so much for coming back a second time! Really appreciate the effort and the fact that it paid off! Cheers Boni

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